by tomthewriter
The chapters are much too short and very little happens in each one. I’d suggest making longer chapters with more in each in the future.
can you please write more, this has got to b the best story ever!!
The more I read this story I am questioning where your from. Being originally from Mississippi the dialogue makes sense.. hence the word "finna"... I dont know... Either way I hope you continue to keep writing and remember that sucess is going from failure to failure without loosing enthusiasm. Done be discouraged with negative comments as words were invented for humans need to complain.