All Comments on 'College Visit'

Where's the rest!!!!!!!!!!!!!

It was an ok start, however it really should have been longer.

You have an average introduction here. I have read this same scenario in hundreds of stories. How about finishing it???

Mannnn Dang... When do we get the rest..? Is this a test of how to keep incest story lovers in suspense..?

it#s called 'Literotica'! not' 'my family history-ica'! why submit a story when it hasn't even started yet? You're a timewaster.

Well, as far as I know Literotica.com is an erotic website?

So far your story has only presented the actors in your play, you need indeed a better presentation of the brother and sister, as I can't imagine how they really look from your description, you know I like a kind of foreplay, before you (I hope) build up the story in a further installment to a climax.

I give you the benefit of doubt, but honestly it was not a good start!

Asgard

where is the end?

The intro was a bit long, but that isn't a bad thing, and I like long intros. Please continue the story though. A bit of constructive advice...there was no real hook to get anyone to want to read the next chapter. No excitement, no "hot and bothered" feeling. Hopefully the next chapter will come soon and will quickly get erotic. :)

Bored out of my mind. the only reason i didn't back up was that i kept thinking it'd get better... it didn't. No long narritives, you need sex to have it be called erotica as in LITEROTICA. missed a crucial point there, bub. try again, don't give up

Story is too short. You didn't have the characters get hot with each other. All you have is the possiblities that the brother wants his sister and that the sister is getting turned on enough to sleep with him. Okay beginning. Not enough spaces between the paragraphs. Finish it please!

plot is a little thin! better to establish a relationship than tease. leave 'em saying 'do her again!' instead of just 'dooooooo!'

Wheres part 2 at least i hope theres gonna be more it's so unfinished

Man they always cut it off when it starts to get good

Great start...but where's the rest? You've set the stage, now is the time to start building up and creating true erotica.

13 inches??? You should be in porno not football :-) How did you get the jock strap on during games?

Ok build up to part 2

According to Wardell B. Pomeroy, the longest penis on record is ten inches.

yeah ok .. pretty vivid imagination you got there

a 13 inch cock yeah right

if you cant do any better go write kiddie stories

i stopped reading at the totally stupid 13" cock give us a break will you. keep it atleast somewhat realistic and believable please and stop over compensating for your own short falls.

I thought the place you stopped was a crappy one. Not enough build up...too abrupt of a stop.

13" - Really? Come on! That put the story in the realm of unbelievability for me. To tell everyone that he is just the average guy but... has a 13 in cock, that's not reality.

I'm not going to rant about cock size. After all John Holmes was supposedly 14"(and yes, I know that's an aberration). You have a story that's not much of a story. It's more like an overlong Tweet.

Interesting, wonder where it goes next. 5/5