All Comments on 'Coming Home to Master 13'

How long are the books you normally read? I was concerned that my chapters are too short...

This chapter was helpful in explaining her through process - although I still struggle with how they interact/talk in the presence of people who are not in the lifestyle. In addition to that - it doesn't seem as if he really shares anything with her or provide some form of framework. I understand and love when there is an air of anticipation and the unknown but based on your description it seems as if she is still learning and it doesn't seem as if he checks in enough to know if he is pushing too fast i.e. the airplane, resturarant etc.,

Again, you mention how intellegent she is - and in previous chapters you spoke of Charlette and others who he has helped achieve their ultimate goals or finding others that could help them....what about Bella? I still feel as if I am missing something. BTW, does the poor girl ever get to wear clothes....LOL

This wasn't too long at all. Seems more like the standard for a quick read. The more immersive stories on this site tend to go past 4-5 pages.

findingmyway - i have tried to address some of these issues in the next chapter.

Anonymous - thanks for the comment about the length. Now i don't feel so bad.

The comments really help and i will continue to try to improve the story.

Thanks

~M