All Comments on 'Community Involvement Ch. 01'

You have great potential. You need a little work on the details of grammar, punctuation, & proofreading but otherwise a good beginning. Get a good editor. Keep the chapters coming.

I like your story and look forward to more chapters in your story

If you go to Literotica "Index" there is a section "Volunteer Editors".

Get one.

The story contained many silly errors that a good Editor would help you recognise and avoid.

Thanks for all your feedback.

Since the original post I have edited the story and made some adjustments.

Enjoy… Cheers :)

I'm sure you're already aware of the minor grammatical errors. This chapter was a good setup, but it lacked any real sex.