by SteveWallace
As usual, a fine part one stretched beyond belief or hope. Your first part was erotic - this is just boring.
I've never read a story here that has survived beyond two parts. I can't understand why people go on and on - up to 50+parts.
Egotism, I reckon. Certainly not literary merit. There is artistic skill in knowing when to shut up!
Keep doing what you are doing...sure enjoy your stories!
Love the story line, but the characters seem kind of similar. If you decide to continue the series, suggest you bring in some Asian women for variety and to spicen it up, either single or married. One could be a reluctant participant at first and then totally goes for the lifestyle.
I really loved the story up till now, but I would suggest to elaborate some descriptions regarding the anal and DP in more erotic way