All Comments on 'Conjugal Gifts 4 U'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 19 years ago
Har!

Hilarious! Great ending too! I guess that job is too good to be true...

AnonymousAnonymousover 19 years ago
Pretty good...

Nice story.

But, it could use a little more content, maybe you didn't have to end it so early.

Great concept, though.

sacksackover 19 years ago
I knew that was too good to be true!

Breezy, very witty tale. I wish it wasn't a dream for his sake!

AnonymousAnonymousover 19 years ago
LOL!

good one! poor guy ... i know many a teenager who would kill to be in his dream though...

QballzQballzover 16 years ago
Good start, but I was never a fan...

Of dream sequence endings. Too much of a cop out. Also, I understand that you are shooting for a comical tale, but some of the characters are so overdone that it's obvious that this is going to be a over the top fairy tale. If you tone down the characters a bit to make them more believable, you would probably have a better story and maybe the dream sequence ending would be a little more surprising. Still, made me chuckle, so thanks.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago
Damn!

been there, done that, have the spotted sheets. 'Twas 55 years ago and I still haven't forgiven Mom for waking me! Lynn

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago

lovely surprise ending

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
Nice story does not even begin describing this one

Dear writer, seldomly have i read such a clear and well writen story.

Compliments to you, especially for that smal twist at the end!

SonofCalliciousSonofCalliciousalmost 9 years ago
You got me!

You had me going there for a bit. Of course, I knew it was farcical, but your punch line was great. I don't understand the low score for this one. Well done, sir.

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Haha!

That was quite funny :D

Coochielover71Coochielover715 months ago

What a dream that must have been. Sounds like mom was wise to not get too close to the dreamer.

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