by Tony155
Hilarious! Great ending too! I guess that job is too good to be true...
Nice story.
But, it could use a little more content, maybe you didn't have to end it so early.
Great concept, though.
Breezy, very witty tale. I wish it wasn't a dream for his sake!
good one! poor guy ... i know many a teenager who would kill to be in his dream though...
Of dream sequence endings. Too much of a cop out. Also, I understand that you are shooting for a comical tale, but some of the characters are so overdone that it's obvious that this is going to be a over the top fairy tale. If you tone down the characters a bit to make them more believable, you would probably have a better story and maybe the dream sequence ending would be a little more surprising. Still, made me chuckle, so thanks.
been there, done that, have the spotted sheets. 'Twas 55 years ago and I still haven't forgiven Mom for waking me! Lynn
Dear writer, seldomly have i read such a clear and well writen story.
Compliments to you, especially for that smal twist at the end!
You had me going there for a bit. Of course, I knew it was farcical, but your punch line was great. I don't understand the low score for this one. Well done, sir.
What a dream that must have been. Sounds like mom was wise to not get too close to the dreamer.