by gabrielmontello
It'd be interesting to see more, hopefully have you explain some of the tag. Please however, less italics?
I like the idea of a more scientific view of a succubus. However, this is an erotica site, so people are expecting to see the hot & sweaty part of the plot as well.
Also, dialogue does not need to be italicized. Italics usually denote a characters personal thoughts rather than external dialogue, which made the reading a bit confusion.
The story has great potential though and I hope you continue it.
intersting take on the succubus. looking forward to seeing more. The dialogue was a bit hard to follow but tje plot and story madeit bearable. looking forward to more. good work>