All Comments on 'Cordelia's Rebound Girl'

One of your best yet cant wait to see the next chapter i hop queen c eventualy becomes faiths bitch

The writing is pretty good but its too long for a single sitting. One time on page 6 you went way too long without a paragraph break as well. This would have been better off as two stories told from each point of view. Still you captured teh charachters extraordinarly well.

would have been the way to go. But overall the writing was great. I know it definately got me hot imagining the two of them together.

I dont really think that two stories would be the way to go . The switchingback and forth is a cool unique styl what the writer should work on is espresing the difren views with out dwelling on thing we all ready knew If thatmakes sense to any one els.

This was a good story it may have been a bit long due to the two point's of view going over the same stuff but it was also interesting (at least to me) to read from both of the character's persectives. I also hope that there is a sequel in the works.

i love the story made me laugh more then turn me on and had faith down packed lol a few lines had me laughing really hard when i pictured it especially when faith was thinking "Please close, please close, please close, please close, please close, thank God." after the anal lol

very irritatingly written; uses alternative POV's to duplicate every part and skips a line after every sentence if not after every word. As tho the writer wants to stretch the story out to cover as many pages as physically possible. I can't imagine how the writer could imagine that this would somehow improve the story!

obviously this is a very hot depiction of girl-girl sex, made hotter by the mental images of some favorite characters. i like how you managed to more or less capture their personalities accurately. the alternate pov device is good; its one ive always wanted to use but couldnt quite pull it off. i thought it was funny how the parts told from cordelia's pov were less grammatically correct and sort of spacy and the parts from faith's were analyzing and possessive