All Comments on 'Couple's Vacation in the Caribbean Ch. 01'

Good first story. Lots of opportunities on beaches -- nudidty (Orient beach on St Martin), dune sex, voyeur, exhibitionism, etc. Maybe some play on beach and wives switch.

GREAT BUILD UP CAN'T WAIT FOR CHAPTER 2

I guess we will see how far you want to go, if you and your wife have enough passion for each other or you need others to help. In just making your marriage more wonderful and exciting for you both of course, cause we all know your thinking about how much you love each other while fucking someone else, right?

It's always such a turnoff when writers think that huge breasts are important to a story. I suppose it's all right to describe pendulous breasts, but it doesn't do anything for me because I equate it with a fat body.

Can't wait for part 2!!

Well developed and written so far. let's hope part is as good or better.

Hey! Nice storyline overall. Your greatest area for improvement is your comma use. It’s a little distracting from your overall message. One thing I noticed in particular, is that you use the phrase, “as that,” “as he,” “as she is,” etc far too often. If you feel like you’re adding it in, your sentence is too long. Keeping your sentences shorter will help eliminate the excessive commas and make the material easier to digest. Keep writing- you have a strong writer’s voice!