All Comments on 'Craving for My Brother's Cum'

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A sister craves to smell and taste his brother's manhood.

Her means belonging to a female.

Her brother's manhood would be correct for a sister.

His means belonging to a male.

His brother's manhood would be correct for gay sex between two brothers.

Not bad for a first story.

Junk, crap, garbage.

It is wonderful when brother and sister get along so well. Many have helped each other out in sexual way. It can be beneficial to both.

Yes, his sister wanted it so bad and he let her have it .... she will want it more and more and he will give it. I hope she screws him hard and a lot. So much potential. She should describe it next time ....... Thank you and cannot wait for a few more chapters.

Interesting to read considering your first language is not english. Please keep going with this story.

Your English is fine and your story is quite readable NB. Please continue and write longer chapters as you get more into your story. I don't mean you need to span more of your time together in each chapter so much as describing your love making more elaborately and saying more about how it feels. Good start.

The fact that English is not your first language is rather obvious, but your introductory comments allowed us to enjoy your efforts in spite of that. This is an easy fix if you want. You don't need much, if any, help with your story craft, but, yes, you could use a little help with the English. There are a lot of editors that are free to use on here and if you tell them what you are looking for, they will be glad to help.

Keep writing and entertaining us.

If you don't find an editor to your liking give me a shout.

Thanks for the read

Very good, more please.

Good work NaughtBlush,

By reading this and the work you have posted from other authors and despite its not your first language you have done a great job to describe from a sisters POV how you managed to seduce your brother and suck the milk from his knob...we dont hear the next stage in the story but I am sure its coming as you reach this milestone in your real relationship with your sexy brother.

We need another chapter

Free. Milk daily. I am hard

Nice work! Haven't read any good PH-set work here, so thumbs up to you and your work!

That's a nice story with much potential.... very arousing. Some physical details about his sister would be good too and some details about her brother and how big his cock / balls are. They should make out too. Nice and cannot wait for more, thank you.

I know, I know, ESL - but still hard to get beyond that^^

You didn't do bad for English being your second language, you did better than some people do when English is their first language. Good plot and nicely done!!! I've given you four stars ⭐⭐⭐⭐

Aww..that was GOOD but you have to give the girl what she wants! Hopefully in the NEXT chapter?

5 Star. Very good, could have used a paragraph or two on how and why she needed cock so badly.

English may not be your first language, but the story is still good and the sex scene is still erotic. 5 stars

Good story! very good and I gave it a 5 for the sex and the setting. The rain on the windows, sounds realistic.