All Comments on 'Crazy In Love'

Needs a lot of editing. It was agonizing to read. I like the story line but in places it makes no sense.

Please if you continue the story, have it edited.....

You need a translator, not an editor. Some of your sentences don't even make sense. Either get an editor or try another hobby.

i could not even finish the 1st page.broken sentences wrong words or just plain wtf are you trying to say here kept me from reading the rest.

I agree with the other comments, you have good writing abilities but definitely need an editor. I am looking forward to your future stories, hopefully with an editor

I couldn't even finish the story. You are in desperate need of an editor, or at least after finishing a page, read it aloud to yourself, you just may catch all the grammatical errors. Sorry.

,...........effort by the author and if there was any the editor and the translator.

Literotica hang your head in shame for publishing this story in its current form.

After reading this story one felt sorry for the poor little rich girl. After her little stint before college. She finally grew up. Life had to be learned. I hpoe there is more to this story as I am anxious to know the outcome.

I am like many of the others who have left comments. The story is very hard to read due to the countless grammatical errors. I was only able to get the introduction read before I had to stop. When you write your stories, please ask someone to edit and proofread your work before you submit it. I am sure it is a good story. However, in its current form, it is very unreadable.

yes it needs editing BUT it is a good story. Please, please don't be discouraged. It wasn't that hard to understand. I enjoyed it and stayed with it from beginning to end.

It was sweet and there is room to expand the story explaining some of the demon mentioned more, you could work to deepen the readers committment to the main character herself and her friendship with Stella, and you can draw us deeper allowing us to make an emotional connection with our main characters as individuals and as a couple. This is how good stories start so keep going. And I will not ignore the effort it takes to write in Anither language. You will over come the language issues. And please know, I went on the read the submissions you wrote a few years back. i'd love to see the completion of that story as well.

Thanks for sharing! Plz keep writing! I'll keep commenting, if you keep writing. Enjoy ur evening.

Beautiful story but needs correction. Don't be discourage, you'll do better. Loved it. Keep writing

This is a potentially interesting story spoiled. From some of the strange construction and peculiar/incorrect use of words, I guess that English is not your first language. If I'm right, then this is a praiseworthy effort. But you do need to get a good editor because the more one reads, the more difficult it becomes to carry on reading. 'Meaghan Belle Jenkins' sounds neither Russian nor Iranian---it sounds Welsh more than anything. When you wrote about 'ashtrays', I think you meant 'a stray' or 'astray' (an ashtray is something you drop cigarette ash into). These are just examples, and they are the sort of errors which a competent editor should pick up and correct.

Why anybody would bother reading further than that, I do not know.

Obviously English is your second language, but you really need to make an effort.

Hey I want a 2nd part of it.will u write for us pleassssssse its a request.....

Please!!!!!! This story has too much potential to stop now. I feel the way Meaghan did when Ellis was avoiding her.

When will you release chapter#2? Other than some incomplete sentences I'm hooked on this series. Definitely rates: 5🌟's

I loved this story i cant wait to experience moments like this in my life..