All Comments on 'Creampie Revenge'

Great and hillarious revenge story, but the names in the story got mixed up in some spots. For example:

"To Jack: Peter gets the last laugh asshole. This may get circulated further but Helen has her copy already. Enjoy."

You meant this for the antagonist Freddie Right?

I saw that error after submission. Good catch. Glad you enjoyed the story despite the glitch.

the message after Helen's should have been to Freddie, not Peter.

What?! zzzzzAhhhaa 😴 never mind... zzzzzzzz😴

Ah yeahhh, Freddy fucked them all. That maters.

The 'plot' was a little too 'cute' to be enjoyable. I'm sure the author was able to keep track of who and where everyone was but the effort of keeping track kept me from getting into the story. 'Freddie' was not well developed as a character no were the female 'conspirators'. The whole story verged on confused and I suspect all the participants would have been 'players' to some extent and therefore not really able to be considered characters who a reader would continue either the 'wronged' party nor truly a villain OK but not great 2** Thank You.

That is the best revenge for a two timing ashore. Would love to capture something's that on video tape!

Orpheum69

I'd like to see a part Two where Jack and Sue hook up, and if it develops into anything more.