All Comments on 'Creating a Redheaded Monster Ch. 01'

Very interesting characters. I look forward to the next chapter

Great story, it grabs you and places you under it's spell.

Amazing sex in an unbelievably creative context. Some of the best writing I have encountered. The serial tension is measured but powerfully intense. You draw out the suspense in breathtaking ways.

I gave this a five in spite of the poor character building on Mona, so it really deserves a four instead. She's supposed to be a mentally distraught 18/19 year old homeless girl. But there were times that the dialog you gave to her and the actions you assigned to her, painted her as someone 12 to 14 years old. Someone who has suffered from a traumatic event like Mona did, doesn't regress into childish behavior. Her speech impediment was accurately done, so that's not what I'm specifically taking issues with. I just feel like you had trouble trying to accurately portray someone like Mona and took her character in the wrong direction. 😕

I'm absolutely loving Emma wanting Mona to be part of the family, sharing her love with Scot. I think that just about every red blooded male would love to be married to someone like her. 5/5