All Comments on 'Cries from a Desperate Man'

Hopefully this is only part 1 and it will develop into something because this is as boring as hell.

Phuckin arfull

Not a bad beginning to a good story. I suggest you find somebody to do some editing for you prior to your next submission though.

I like the story so far and hope you continue it, it's interesting and very original (something that isn't the most common here, good job!)

Original take on incest. Picked up on spelling errors etc but it didn't detract from the story. Good stuff. Sequel? C'mon don't leave us hangin man. Let Marshall surrender to his sister Shante. Dr Frankenstein has created an incestuous monster but... is that really a bad thing? Chapter 2?

And then he stuck a pin in her skyscraper sized titties and she floated away as they deflated violently.