All Comments on 'Cuckold Husband'

I have no idea why anyone would write something like this in second person. Not all your readers are cum hungry cuckolding sluts. They're not even cuckolds either. Writing in second person only hurt what may have been a good humiliation story.

sorry, only two for this one

Try again with either first or third person. First works best

Amanda

Very very very few readers are going to be able to relate directly to the female in a cuckold relationship, so by writing this way you've alienated about 90% of your audience who will actually enjoy your story.

Why on earth do people ruin a potentially good story by writing in the second person. There is no need for it.

I would love to meet a man like John. I would definately marry him!

I've always had a problem with stories written in your style. I was tempted to take my trusty word processor and change all the "you" and "your"s to she and her but that act causes complications as well. :-)

It could have been worse, one writing style I dislike even more is when the story is written in the present as in: I arrive at the airport and as soon as I exit the arrival hall .. etc. etc. First person and past tense are best. I don't dislike your story, only the style!