by melsdad
Save your 'LOL's for the teenagers in chat rooms. Internet shorthand has no place in any form of literature
It was posted under the title "Father Peeps on Daughter."
OK, it's a crap story, but I have to take issue with the commentator who said that internet shorthand has no place in any form of literature! Nonsense! All forms of verbal communication have a valuable part to play in literature.
Your story had a very pleasant effect on this confirmed voyeur! The rest be damned - it turned me on.
I'm sorry..It was pretty horrible. Plus, I do agree with the person who commented on the person who commented on not using lols. There's a very good book out called TTYL that is all written as though it were done with three girls on an instant messenging program (a very strange one, considering they say brb to talk to someone in another window...) but for this story, it was just out of place, and made you seem, well, dumb, to be honest. The idea of this would've been better if something actually happened...
Unless I missed something the guy's jacking off while looking into the widows of his own house, and I'm supposed to believe that no one saw him.
This was the funniest incest story I've ever read!
And yes, your use of "LOL" was quite appropriate.
Nevermind those prudes who tell you otherwise.
I loved your last comment about its a wonder something
didn't grow out of the grown from all of your cum!
Ha hahahahaha!
sorry but i have to agree... needs more depth and whats up with the numbers???!?
I did exact same thing. Kik toriavick and mention this site to chat about this topic