by daddysgirl83
For me, what makes a story hot and exciting for me is when the thoughts of what is going on in the females's head is put into the story. More description of how bad they feel, or humiliated, or shameful would help this story. The actions and descriptions what he is doing is good, but more detail. Overall good story and concept.
Liked it until he rapes the twins. Sorry, could only give it a 2.