All Comments on 'Daddy Dearest Ch. 01'

why did you bother writing it?

Ignore the trolls and keep up the good work.

Not the behavior and reaction you'd expect if your character's age had remained consistent. No, I get a pretty strong vibe that you did a sloppy "cut and paste" edit on the version you submitted to get around the requirements on this website.

Oh, and it wasn't particularly well-written, far too rushed, and way too short to be credible.

too shortDFE1

Ignore the rubbish comments - many of us like short - just keep going

I am not a fan of critizing some ones' work but I feel there is an exception here.

Her dads wants to try something new and she just jumps to the idea of incest without a first thought, never mind a second? Nothing at the beginning leads the reader to believe that was even a possibility between the two, a little work up to it would of been nice. I can handle short, but this was just verrrrrry rushed.

If you're gonna tell a story, *tell* a story... :(