All Comments on 'Daddy Visits Me at School'

The switch back and forth, first/third person (i/he) to first/second person (i/you) to first/third person (i/he) was a little disruptive to the flow of the story, made what could have bee a five star story a 4 star one. I can see the erotic possibilities in the second person. Consider an entire story written in first/second person.

Yes, I realized too late that I mixed up the perspective a couple of times, but thanks for pointing that out. I hope you otherwise enjoyed it :)

Once again, someone who has to resort to calling a woman a whore and slut. Disgusting!!

Some women like it, I'm one of them :p if you are looking to kinkshame you are in the wrong place :)