All Comments on 'Daddy's Girl'

This is not your best by any means. I think you could rewrite this and add some more detail and make it so much better. The worst of the three you posted today. Please try again.

I read this first and then read everything else you've written. Very prolific in such a short period of time. It is probably things you have written earlier and just posted close together. The volume of poems posted leads me to think of the reason why your three stories are viewed as rushed. I liked the story lines in each story, but I thirst for more detail. I'm sure the details are in your mind, they simply refused to translate to written word. This story is one that may have missed the mark establishing what direction it is heading. Take a little more time with the stories defining leading circumstances to culmination. You are doing a good job right out of the gate. Keep it up and you will get better reviews.

RS

I liked it, especially afterwards when she snuggled up to her daddy with his seman dripping out of her cunt

Great beginning to a story of incest and how they continue having sex. A smug little bitch like her who likes having sex with her father is eventually going to get pregnant by him