All Comments on 'Daddy's Sunshine'

Sunshine and Daddy wake up virgin best friend

Sunshine needs to end up pregnant

Shayenne aka Sunshine and her daddy return home to fuck waking up her virgin best friend who then joins in the sexual fun

Mom goes to jail and they fuck her passed out friend.

Mom if she survives is headed for rehab and jail.

Sunshine, and perhaps her Dad as well, need to do something to save Sunshine's friend from a similar fate of alcoholism as Sunshine's Mom .

If Sunshine's friend gets clean and sober, then the two of them could become longtime lovers.

Sunshine and her Dad will have to deal with Sunshine's pregnancy.

Loved the story line. Good flowing plot. Can't wait for the next chapter!!

It is awkward sounding, and you frequently switch between present and past. A past tense flows more easily. Not to say that present tense is by its nature bad, but it takes a very skilled writer to unfold a story “in the now” and you’re not there - yet.

Keep writing!

Enjoy the Story. Go for option #1.

I really enjoyed your story. I like the idea of tormenting the alcoholic mother.

Hello, my beloved readers!

So far the comments are mostly wonderful and I appreciate them so. I want to write what you want to read, so please correct anything that I've messed up. As such, I will work on the past/present tense thing. Didn't even realize I did it. Sorry!

It looks like part 2 is heading toward Sunshine's bestie losing her cherry to Detective Daddy, too. Tell everyone what: I will wait until next Saturday, 2/23/18, to see what the final votes tally and I will write it that same day. The approval process takes 3-5 days, so be patient with me. I'll get you your part 2. :)

Also, please vote. You don't have to, but I would appreciate it.

Lastly, for the user who said that the mom is prison-bound, yes. You're right. She's injured, though, and Daddy is a Detective. I'll have to research the law, but I'm pretty sure I can pretend that she is released to her officer husband under the assurance that he will prevent her from being a flight risk. If that isn't an option, I can always have Sunshine and her Daddy be naughty in/on/against the hospital bed with drugged up Mom sort of watching; but thinking it's a dream. LOL! The options are endless.

Thank you, all! <3

Go with dad daughter and bestie

I wholeheartedly agree with the anon suggestion about tense. Past tense almost always reads better.

Another small narrative issue: You begin in first person POV, which means we’ll only be able to know the thoughts of the 1st P narrator. That’s an accepted element of fiction. How is it then that we hear the phone conversation she can’t and we get to hear the dad’s thoughts? Is she clairvoyant? This elements are sloppy when

Compared to what otherwise is a well crafted story. You can do better than that.

But let’s hear about the drunken friend before the vindictive little bitch tortures her mother. The former is more fun and the latter not very sexy.

All three, best friend in the morning making both teens sex slaves, then the mother a sub to the daughter and father.

Continue as you see fit. As your mind sees it. And of course, Shayenne aka Sunshine and her daddy return home to fuck waking up her virgin best friend who then joins in the sexual fun when bedridden mom comes home and have sex on the bed beside her while she's heavily drugged up pain meds.

I think both would be great

See above.

Involve the virgin best friend. After all, she's got to learn some time too. lol

i think the second one would fit better as it shows the love of the father and daughter and how even the mother cannot part them. however with the best friend, it wouldn’t be very believable as i know if i fucked my dad, no bitch would have him apart from me.

I like the idea of popping her friends cherry but think it better if mom died

Both options!! Part 2 the friend threesome - part 3 next to the mother - part 4 the mother who recovers and joins husband and daughter

Don't add the best friend. She wouldn't be one if she fucked her daddy. Her daddy belongs to Sunshine only. Don't sacrifice their love for someone who would only be a screw and a complication. No matter what it will be a waste if you do. I want the daddy daughter romance to grow. To let them really exclude everyone else. He demanded it of her. Have her demand it of him.

Kill the mother. She is a drunk and irresponsible. She could have killed others. If you leave her alive she seriously needs to either go to prison or get both the hot daddy cop and daughter to punish and humiliate her. Or you could better yet get the daughter to become a dominant and get the mom to become submissive and have her beg their forgiveness and make amendments. She seriously needs to pay for the humiliation she gave her daughter. Make the mom watch as her husband takes their daughter and become a happy couple.

Never take the daddy from the daughter though. They belong to each other only.

I would love to see a continuation but I also agree with others that have said leave out the friend and kill of the bitch of a mother Luna .

I like the idea of Shay and her daddy falling in love and starting a family whether mom’s in the picture or not. Adding the best friend just makes it another sex story: older man fucking virgin teen girls. Not that there’s anything wrong with that (haha). But with the first you could really work out the conflict: a guilty cheating Dad, sick mom, pregnant daughter, unrequited secret love affair...

We know nothing about the friend, so not much of interest or at stake in Dad taking her. Daddy and Shay unable to stop themselves, even with the mom in the room, feels hotter, more intense.

i really liked this story. Sheyenne "Sunshine" will ultimately displace her mother Luna; whether Luna survives or succumbs to her injuries. Charleston will impregnate his daughter, if he hasn't already done so.

I am not interested in writing the story with you, but I am willing to beta read it and offer corrections, if any are needed.

Option 2

And the mom dies in surgery ;-)

EXCELLENT story

Mother is a real bitch. Survives, but Father divorces her.

Can't wait for the next chapter.

To part 2. I say no to her drunk friend in YET. Develop the relationship between dad and Sunshine more. Definitely no to fucking on the bed next to mom. Thats sick. Dad needs to divorce Luna due to her going to to prison. Definately NO to Sunshine getting pregnant. No fucking way. YET. Good story. Believable. Slow sex scenes. Not just monkeyfucking. Shows a dads torment about fucking his daughter. Loved it. 5 stars

DragonRider55

Great story, loved how you let it develop, I think the mother is done, either by death, or prison/divorce. I would like to see her gf involved, but not yet. Let it come slowly and as natural as the father/daughter sex did. Just my unasked for opinion.

Yes, neither

Yes, option 1

First option

Option one and then some!!

Option two is so hot. Please do two.

Option 2

Option 2 please!!!!!

Great story. Five stars!

Luna dies in surgery. Shayenne then spends the next 22 years barefoot, naked, & pregnant by her father. Having at least 26 children by him, & giving to birth to a new baby every 10 months.

Option 2 is most highly fucked up.

Someone came up with an option 3 that was good but if that's not viable then option 1 pls. Thankx.

I like the idea of Option 1, want to see what happens with the friend also

Option 1

Yes, Option 1! And soon, giggling!

Lots of fans of option 1, but also a lot of option 3: Sunshine needs a baby. LOL!

You guys want to see her pregnant with her Daddy's baby? I might make that happen.

Thank you for commenting!!

1 sounds so hot

"Daddy..." I whimper against his hand, my eyes watering; he moves his hand. "That hurt."

He frowns, then nods. "I know, Baby Girl, but it's only because Daddy has a big cock and your pussy is just so fucking tight..."

Option 1 for sure.

Option 2 for sure. Keep their love to themselves

by all means have her catch & join in

mom can come home in ch. 3

I think you can do both but may be too much.. bestie can wake up and join and then another chapter of bringing drugged mom home to be played with also.

Pretty please😄

Bring in the friend kill the mom off lol.

Loved your story and writing. Please continue with a part 2 (and more!) and I vote for Option 1. Looking forward to the next chapter!

Love the story, though how the mother got to drive after being arrested for the DWI and Assault charges beats me. Anyway, I choice Option #1.

The first option would be a great part two to the story. I'm fine without the mom lol

I love the idea of them doing it infront of the drugged up mom.

Mom dies in hospital during surgery. Daddy and Sunshine go home grieving and console each other. Daughter replaces mom in dad's life and bears him 2 children.

Daddy and daughter in front of mom

OPTION 2 PLEASE

Option 2

2!!!!!

Ladies, gentlemen, and anonymous, thank you for your comments. ;)

Option 2 was surprisingly popular, but so was making Sunshine pregnant. I'm sorry to tell you that I'm not ready for Sunshine to be pregnant, yet. I will start writing part 2 tonight and I look forward to the comments on that!

Thank you for your replies. <3

Option 1 bring Irvin friend into their bed.

2!!

2!!

1

Option 1, mom should pass away and daughter and friend helps dad with the loss and emotions

Definitely option 1.. although mom might deserve option 2..

Definitely option 2!!!! Luna deserves that and much more for letting Daddy suffer!!

1 . And knocks them. Both up

Mom deserves it ..

Option 1 is so cliched and played out. Option 2 is a different concept from other ones on here.

Option number two because why bring another person into a passion that only belongs to them, that could screw it up, and wouldn't Luna end up in Jail after all of that!?

I say do #1....but while they are in the middle of everything, they find out mom is having an affair

Hello, faithful followers!

Thank you for your patience. Part 2 has been submitted for publication today, so give it a few days before looking for it.

As usual, I thank you for your support and ask that you please vote for my work!

Stay naughty.

-Daddy's Hellion

All fathers and daughters should experience such uninhibited love.

I think option 1 should be in play, have Mom die of injuries from the accident. Perhaps she was in the bar to buy drugs, prior to the accident

Daddy's Sunshine is steamy. Am going to read the other two chapters. Thanks for sharing your talent with us.

#2

#2

I was rubbing my pussy so hard to this.. my step dad came in midcum and fucked my pussy so hard I squirt every where.. can’t wait to read part two

...option #1. Waking up the best friend.

Parts 2-4 are already published.

Part 2 l, they fuck and she gets pregnant and as they look after the mother they continue to have sex

Part two: absolutely!!

Wake up the best friend.

Love this Sunshine story! I’m rereading it waiting for the next installment after Part 4 :) I know you’re really busy so I’ll be patient! I love that this story is really sweet and intense (and really erotic of course) and I just love it.

I want to read in graphic detail how daddy fucks her ass and takes her anal virginity.

Describe how he slowly forces his cock into her tight little rectal opening

did you name her luna after the dog

I prefer the first option with possible additions.

Please keep writing your doing a great job. You don't need

Audience participating!!! Still all you Sugar!!

We love your story, prefer option 1

the Mother dies and removes any complications OR accepts defeat and becomes thier slave

I hope there wont be any threesome with her friend :v I actually prefer just daughter and daddy. And thank you for this great story

So good. Mom is going to know something is different. Toy with the jealousy thing and then be rid of her perhaps. Bitch.

She passes and they go on to love one another. The friend? I don't care one way or the other.

So naughty, so sexy, made me cum so hard. Option no. 2 and he should get her pregnant!!

Friend is gone when they return, he knocks up his Sunshine and they get a call that psycho mom has passed away during surgery.

Her friend nor mother not know at all. Their little secret, wouldn't want her friend to join cause, she might want more if it from him. That would ruin the love life of that. With him saying that it's his pussy, not share their secret to no one.

Hopefully her mother would be better from the hospital.

Great story.. Yes I would love to read a part 2 and I say both they get home and fuck waking her friend that joins them and then a few days later the bring bedridden mom home from the hospital and fuck next to her while she is drugged. Sunshine ends up getting pregnant and daddy gives wife/mom a choice she quits drinking and becomes their sex slave or they get a divorce and she moves out.

I loved this. She really needed daddy's cock, and it was so erotic when he filled her aching pussy with his white chocolate. Just bliss, I want that for my birthday too.

Make sure she gets pregnant by daddy!