All Comments on 'Dancing for Joy'

A great love all mothers and sons should experience.

hurried. I couldn't justify any more than three stars because of that.

You have an enjoyable writing style, your choice of descriptions is adequate, but you need to slow down the pace and build up.

Will watch for future submittals hoping to see some improvement.

Some very realistic elements with panties in the beginning. Many guys have similar feelings and desires.

Just to short and no feeling.... bummer!

Nice buildup, then the fucking was a short couple paragraphs. Needs to be longer.

How was the entry ? Why the condom ? How large was his COCK ? Will she take him without a condom ? Will she relent to him wanting bareback sex ? Please continue with another chapter, more details of the actual sex.

Thanks Mr. NL ....

I had kind of thought the opposite, that my story was too long. It felt long when I was writing it. It helps to know that the folks reading it had the opposite reaction. I can really delve more into the fantasy in the future.

The writing was very good and the build up of the story and people was great ... but 3 paragraphs end the story? I would start a new story chapter 2 picking up as they walk in the door. Go into detail how they totally explore each others body and how mind blowing the sex is. It was a great start but it left the reader hanging at the end. Cheers Lance