All Comments on 'Dancing in Eden Pt. 02'

carry on pls...we need more

More more more.

rotten, bone your located the older in all the positions, made him it inceste superb

solid three

Yes, very seductive and hot - shows how horny his sister is for her brother and once her brother let his defenses down; they went at it. I hope in the next chapter; they screw each other hard and slow plus like their new arrangement. They love each other too. Very good story. Thanks !!

Try getting someone to proof read for you. wrong words, misspelled words and continuity meant the flow was shit. Get it together, a few hot passages do not make a good story. Your premise was good but everything wrong ruined it.

This one felt rushed, as if we had to get some action started RIGHT NOW. Aside from continued need of a proof reader. Solid 3, but that's for your characters. I gave first chapter a 4.

Want more chapters

Great story so far just wish there I knew how it all ended more chapters please

Wish this story didn't end. You have a remarkable talent at writing, I truly wish you would write more. Cheers

I noticed you added something to part 2 that never happened in part 1. They didn't have sex in strip club. He never pulled his dick out and never put it in her. He fingers her and sucked on her tit that's it.

Really shit the bed with chapter 2. Clearly there were rewrites to 1 that didn't reflect in 2.