All Comments on 'Dani and the Bull Ch. 02'

I like the story. I like these two characters. Do you recommend we read the original? It is ahrd to wait for chapters :) Where does the paranormal come in if all the characters are human? I would have liked for the chapter to be longer or to get into some action or something that would leave us more of a cliffhanger...I hope we will find out how he knows of her. How does he know anything of this girl? Hope to find out soon. I also don't understand why he'd go out with her friends if he wants to attract her attention. Doesn't seem the way to get a girl to feel comfortable with you.

It's an interesting story, but it could really use some editing - I noticed several typos and grammatical errors. Also, some of the wording, particularly in the dialogue, feels very awkward. It seems as though you're aiming for a New Orleans/Louisiana dialect, but it comes out a bit mangled and oddly worded. Otherwise, it's a great story; I can't wait to read more.