All Comments on 'Date Night- The Carnival'

One thing - women don't have adam's apples. Only men, which is how it got its name - Adam had one, Eve didn't. Edit out that one line, and you have a winner.

The carnival is this weekend, your story was excelent and gave me the perfect idea of how to seduce my son. Thank you very much.

Great story.

I can't say any more than that.

I cannot wait for all the other date night stories to come. Awesome premise, so much you can invent. Best of luck.

women dont have adams apples

Loved it looking forward to date night's . Keep up the good work.

Liked the story. Very hot.

I have something for those who said that women don't have Adam's Apples....

From Wikipedia:

The laryngeal prominencecommonly known as the Adam's Appleis a feature of the human neck.

The laryngeal prominence is usually more prominent in adult men than in women or prepubescent children. The growth of the larynx itself, and dropping of the vocal box during puberty is responsible for the vocal instability in teenage boys. The laryngeal prominence is merely the protrusion one sees of the thyroid cartilage making up the body of the larynx. The laryngeal prominence is usually more prominent in adult males because the thyroid cartilage elongates during puberty as the voice box becomes lodged in the throat, protruding out the front of the neck more noticeably. The result is that the two laminae (thin cartilage) of the thyroid cartilage that form the protrusion meet at an average angle of 90 in males, and 120 in females, so there is less cartilage protruding out in females.

Glad you are back writing. Looking forward to more 'date night' stories.

Thus, it ought to have been punctuated with this thing called a question mark.

Also, people just don't talk in those long paragraphs. People just don't do it unless they're in Days of our Lives.

The prose is bland too. Read some fiction, then find out about run-on sentences, and come back.

You're a lousy storyteller.

Good at "writing", but shitty at telling good, BELIEVABLE stories.

And this just sucked!

Kindly return to the board please.

Great story got a five from me

Ignore those a*&^* and keep writing. Good story and, yes, you could use some editing. But your story was an enjoyable read, so keep it up. I look forward to the next one!

Very romantic story and while it can use a good bit of editing, you put together a good story. I love the concept of Mom and Son on a date where Mom gets a little (well, maybe a lot), naughty while they are in public!

At first I thought it was going to be another boring story. Then as the story progressed it turned into a very nice love and erotic story. You cut the ending a bit short just as they were headed to the bedroom it could have gotten very erotic I might have even cum. Since she was your date instead of Mom maybe calling her by her first name the way you would your girl friend.( Just a thought.) Good story.

It was nice. I did like the concept of the idea a lot and it was a very nice read that my fiance and I enjoyed very much. We both hope you do some more work like this and don't take any of the negative comments to heart, some idiots just don't have the good graces or tact to say anything more then mean comments. Do work on your editing a little or have someone proof read for you a bit and other hten that for advice keep it up. :D

the story was a good on, i enjoyed it and i know others will too, though the only problem i had with this story is that the mother has an adam's apple....now i know all women do have one but, the likely hood of them showing is very unlikely and often time they have surgery to concel it, it was a huge turn off for me and possably other readers

so romantic. enjoy it very much. love between mom son are so excited in this story. story have a well plot, you can continue this. its reminded my birthday celebration once, me(19) and my mom(48) celebrate alone. we swim together in a pond whole night. she wore a green bikini.

good story, please continue with next chapter.

This was a real turn on! I got pretty wet just reading this. Love these awesome stories!

There was no tension no build up, its insinuated that mom just want's to fuck him from the beginning, sex was pretty boring....you could do much better

I enjoyed it and found the set up different.

A little different, sort of like a rollercoaster. It starts out slowly then picks up speed.

I THINK A MOTHERS LOVE IS WORTH THAT AND MORE. WHO CARES ABOUT AN ADAMS APPLE MISPRINT? IF YOU READ THE STORY AND GET THE MEANING BEHIND THE WORDS, WHO CARES ABOUT A MISSPELLED WORD AND A FLUB IN THE GRAMMAR.IF YOU TOOK HEADS OUT OF YOUR ASSES, MAYBE YOU WOULD SEE THE LIGHT. A FAN........................LAROC OF AGES

Lol, Adam's apple?

I also liked the comment of the reader who wrote "Incest ! YESSSS! Momsom, Dauter and Dad, yesss." Is this guy a fan of family fucking, or what? Yeah, it is great, a daddy sticking his big prick up between his Little Princess's legs and blowing his big fatherly balls up his darling girl's cute little twat. Best of all, though, is a boy shoving his stiff young dick up his mother's mommy-hole and shooting his mom a great big twatful of his creamy semen. Hard family cocks and wet family cunts are a communal good, to be shared and used by dads and moms, sons and daughters, brothers and sisters whenever they feel the urge. That's what family love is all about.

a lovely fantasy , thank tou (spikeco)

do you think that you will continue with this story?

Mother and Son Stories. Best Ever. More, More, More.

ONE WEEK WITH MOM AND, no one else..........THANKS FOR THE READ

That did it for me! Wish you were still writing.

The biggest turn on for me was the mom's confidence, conviction and vision for the carnival night.

Excellent story. Thanks.

Loved it! Five stars and a favorite point!

5 stars definitely. Pleasure to read a story with no mistakes. What wonderful mom that every son deserves.

Sorry, but it was kind of a turn off. When the mother said "don't think of me as MOM" and then the story proceeded calling her Mom. If she's supposed to be his date/girlfriend for the night then that should have been the reference. Yet every time she spoke it was "Win mom a teddy bear" or "get your mother an ice cream cone..." Should have been "Get you date an ice cream," or "Win a teddy bear for your girlfriend" especially when they were around other people.