All Comments on 'Daughter Needs to Feel Filled'

Loved your descriptions of movement, smells and taste and the slow buildup of sexual pressure to the final climax. Felt the end was a bit rushed and seeing this is somewhat of a long story for you, perhaps you lost motivation towards the end. The dialogues were so sexually charged and buildup was great.

A few grammar mistakes though, tends to be distracting, maybe you could get an editor.