All Comments on 'Daughter of Treason Ch. 01'

You have the beginnings of a very good story, well written. I look forward to seeing what happens next to Isakei. Please continue with her story soon. It's a very good read.

You've laid the groundwork for an interesting story. It appears you've thought about your world, your characters, and your plots. I hope you can continue, I see lots of potential.

Like I said awesome start can not wait for the next one. Your grammar and flow are sport on. You had just right balance of action and story can not wait to wat the elf can do. Thank u for sharing mechmanas

Love the story line. would love to read more.

Loved reading this.can't wait to see what happens next.thank you.

Interesting characters and storyline, well written and structured. Definitely looking forward to more! :)

An excellent, well-plotted beginning. Very well written indeed. I would love to read more!

A great start to this story! I'm already drawn into the story with its well-written plot and characters. I can't wait to read more!

its pretty good and you have already put down some nice foundations for the story and the ability t o bring in further back story and characters

You have done a wonderful job creating believable and charming characters. Their growth even in the first chapter has been a pleasure to read. I hope to learn more about Shino in the coming chapters, there seems to be something just under the surface that we haven't quite found yet, or perhaps even he is still looking for it. Kei is a great example of a strong female character. Yes, she is strong and greatly skilled but you have been able to pull in her insecurities and doubts to make a very well rounded young woman. I'm quite excited to continue reading and see where they go next. Great job!

Excellent start to your story.