All Comments on 'David Vanishes'
by juxta_pozed
- 16 Comments
Anonymousabout 16 years agobecause he knew he would never leave there alive, so when he was untied and told to make a run for it, he should have hurt someone. He should have made a vegetable out of Sophie so she could just sit and try to remember what she had actually done. Being a vegetable is worse than death.
laschover 15 years agoNOTE to 'Anon' Heh; you think SOPHIE's creator was bad?? Well, Mr. No-Tact, find and read a story called 'Options' -- that is, unless your reviewing capacity's limited to a couple of lines of SELF-DENEGRATING swearing at authors, lol. Look; if ya can't stand the heat, stay out of the esoterica, pal. Hey - better still: How's about -YOU- writing something, and "show us all how it's done"!
Grow up. THEN come back, yeah? Critique helpfully, or gtfo. Thanks.
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Now... Juxta... Wow, bro! WELL-DONE!! It was ALL of the following(!):
Well-crafted; well-proofed; well-rounded; well-paced & well-grounded.
You cleverly brought the sexy, sly, self-absorbed, sadistic little seductress, 'Sophie', to page-flipping life, making the very real possibility of running into a Girl like her at once every subbie-boy's hottest F/D fantasy, AND most chilling, starkest dread.
Awesome, man; awesome. Great job, dawg. :)
tfb..
Anonymousover 15 years agoWho finds this story anything but disguesting is a sick little chicken fucker. A coward wrote this and only a coward would enjoy it. Go pull some wings and feet off bugs bitch.
Anonymousabout 15 years agoThis is the sexual fantasy of a sociopath, not a mentally stable person. I hope someone gets this removed. It is VERY disturbing.
Anonymousalmost 14 years agohey juxta, have you considered taking your life's savinvgs (all $28) and paying some man-hating crack-whore to make all your fantisies come true, with you as the victim and you as the star of your very own snuff movie?
shit, you are a loser
Anonymousalmost 13 years agoBro, I like S&M a bit, but this was simply disturbing.
Your litererature was amazing, I'll give u that, but your imagination is sick. Although it would be pretty awesome if u made a fic of him escapIng and taking revenge, preferably just killing her and all the rest but with your imagination I'm sure you'll make it insane bondage.
Also, was the guy at the end Crawford? Or did I miss interperate?
Anonymousover 12 years agothe only way this story could have been better, was if the author was the victim......
Anonymousalmost 12 years agoI really don't know what to say. It's really alive. It's heartbreaking too because you can feel "the Boy's" pain and hopelessness. Again...speechless, definitely one of the best submissions I've read on here.
I think it should be expanded to a novel actually. I really don't even know how someone could write about a victim like this one without experiencing first hand what it would feel like. Incredible.
Anonymousover 11 years agoVery sadistic. Though, I do agree w/ the previous comment about lacking in creativity. There was no hope at justice, no interesting plot twists, no love story/Stockholm Syndrome, no real satisfaction after making us feel for David. It didn't even work as jerk-off material as most of the graphic scenes were gay.
Anonymousalmost 11 years agoAnd not worth the reading. One problem I had was when they played the game for him to find the key. If his hands and legs were free, why didn't he remove the gag and blindfold and simply snap her neck? Having been tortured for this long, he would have been like a feral animal and the adrenaline rush would have temporarily given him enough strength to kill his tormentor.
Anonymousover 10 years agoNot even a story. Just the rantings of a mad woman. Not worth a second of anyone's time.
Anonymousover 10 years agoI thought it was a lovely story, and you tell it so well...This story really stands out, of all the other in its genre. It takes the fem/dom role to the extreme. That takes balls.
