All Comments on 'Dawn of Desire'

Beautiful and emotional. 5 stars!!!

You made me tear up...great writing and a wonderful story.

I love character developed stories.

I don't know if you plan to follow-up with a second chapter, but I'm looking forward to reading more of your stories.

Josie

Hi Josie_03,

Thank you so much for your compliments on my story. I'm considering another story with these characters. I have to see where my mind is after Camp NaNoWriMo.

Thanks for commenting!

Cheers,

X

Not my usual story but it definitely pulled me in.

I want to be sickened by this story but it is just too well executed for me to feel that way! You don't go too far with any part of this story. You are a gifted writer with an eye for turning a concept like this into something intriguing and a joy to read. I was going to pass on this a few sentences in but that next sentence hooked me. Thanks for adding to my favorite Lit stories!

no part² 😥?