All Comments on 'Day at the Cottage'

This is so dry, to bland, so meh. Writing actual dialogue instead of the constant “My husband said” crap would REALLY help. As written, there are no real characters, no one with any personality.

No drama. Agree it is told like 'What I did Last Summer.' Just a bunch of 'Tab A into Slot B.'

2*

Voyeur watching his whore in one sad attempt at a story.