All Comments on 'Dead Stick Ch. 01'

Thank you, yet another interesting story to look forward to.

I wish that you'd employ a proofreader.

title say it all.

Shit presentation. Get an editor, you need it.

I still really like the story though. 😁

I suggest you have an editor look this over and repost. Really good story line. A bit hard to read at times though because of the errors. Looking forward to reading the rest. Thank you for taking the time to entertain us.

DJ

this feels like i'm reading a poorly constructed version of the Dresden files only less sexy,there is no buildup and the sex scenes were stale,without any real passion

I don't understand - he captured his sister-in-law, but didn't know who she was??