All Comments on 'Death & Love Ch. 05'

I have enjoyed this story immensely. I am curious, however, to know the reason why the story was written in the first person, when the prime character and narrator was to die.

5/5

when he passed out at the end of chapter 4 i thought it was a bad end but this was worse. you should have had the doctor do the operation while he was out and give him a normal life with his sister and why give the daughter the same condition not nice this needs a rewrite or a alternate endding

DBRS

The doctor didn't do the operation for two reasons:

1: Caleb had already said he didn't want the operation due to the high risk involved.

2: The doctor told Caleb he believed he was to die soon and didn't have the time to take him to the hospital.

As for giving the daughter the same condition, did you really think that two people with the same genetics - and therefore double the risk of passing the disease - would get that lucky. It adds a sense of realism and tragedy to the story.

Please stop trolling and get a real name, don't hide behind anonymity.

That was beautiful u made me cry 5 stars

if you can't take honest comments then stop writing you drag the site down by bashing the readers you deserve to be banned or fined

It's not that I can't take an honest comment, and I'm not bashing the readers. That particular reader (DBRS) has given me problems before with decidedly UNhonest comments and admittedly I was a little annoyed with them.

It was an excellent love story...very well written!

I was hoping for a happier ending, but having him live to see his son and daughter grow up was a perfect ending.

I really liked this story. Keep writing.

Why was she called Hezz?

Hezz is a nickname for Heather, much like Cay is for Caleb. I used it because a friend of mine called Heather gets called Hezz and I thought it would work.

Well, you promised death and love, and you delivered. :)

A VERY good story... the characters were very well fleshed out, which is why at times I was quite angry with them; if you can make me feel anger at a character, you've done a good job of making them realistic. When they decided to have children of their own, I wanted to smack both of them with a 2x4 for their selfishness and idiocy. It didn't make me hate the characters, but it was a big emotional jolt. The fact that the first person narrator dies is unexpected but flowed logically from the story you'd crafted.

Very good, indeed.

how does a dead guy write this

YOU DIDNN'T EVOKE ANYTHING EMOTIONALLY FROM ME. I READ THE WHOLE THING GIVING YOU THE BENIFIT OF THE DOUBT. BUT YOU LACK THE ABILITY TO DRAW READERS INTO THE STORY, IT'S LIKE READING A TRAVELLOG.

To anonymous - and it's a real shame I can't talk to you directly - thank you for at least finishing the story and not giving up half way through. I'm sorry that you didn't gather an emotional response, but I hop you don't judge all my work on this series, this was my first real story and I was still learning. I hope I've gotten better over time and invite you to read my other works and judge for yourself.

Only less capitals, you come off badly when you yell at me.

I understand that everyone is entitled to their own opinions but I personally disagree with the anonymous person. For your first story that was really good and a good mix of story and sex.. These are only really short stories but I felt the writing was too fast like flicked from time a lot.. But once again I loved this and at the end it brought a tear to my eye and my heart hurt thinking of how heartbroken she was now going to be.. An poor carol being sick too :/ keep writing!! :)

This story is by far my most favorite from the laughs all the way through the heart breaking end. Thank you for such a great read I loved every chapter and look forward to read more of your work.

I liked it ! You made me cry , laugh , horny and of course sad . I gave it 5 stars , keep up the good work . Although the story of Heather is no my kind of reading so good luck with that one .

Thanks again

tx cracker

Fantastic very enjoyable read. Nicely done.

Made me cry like a bitch! I love this story series. I hated the death parts because they made me cry, but I knew what I was getting myself into when I started reading; the title Death & Love said it all, and I love it!

I read all the parts in once it was a awesome story made me emotional at the end

But that last part still gets to you. To quote a movie, "a thing isn't beautiful because it lasts." Well done good story.

I hate and love you for this story.

Dear God this story has had me hard, laughing and now my eyes are leaking. Such a beautiful story of sibling love but such a sad ending. I realise though that this will eventually happen to all of us.

A fine story. 5 stars. Thanks for your time and imagination.

Such a beautiful story.

This story make me tears in my eyes....with love, Sacrafice, Angriness,foolness I love this story..... specially with them two siblings.😢😣😭

What a bittersweet ending, don't seem to get many of those with these incest romance stories. It's usually the picture-perfect happy ending. This was a nice change

I enjoyed the story. Having had a LOT of experience with doctors, hospitals & EMTs (I have a 16 year old son who’s medically fragile and my husband had cancer for 7 years), I have to say that it is never easier reaching a doctor than an ambulance. That was totally made up to fit the story. A real doctor would have immediately sent the patient to a hospital even if he seemed ok after the event.

No please don’t do the lesbian shit it’ll ruin everything, leave it at that