All Comments on 'Deb Does Anything'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Interesting story, but . . .

You changed from past tense at the beginning to present tense. Pick one and stick with it. A few missed words and misused words made this a difficult read. Would have liked Deb's perspective or at least facial expressions. She comes across as a group of holes and not as a person.

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