All Comments on 'Deceptions Abound'

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If there is a recipe for how not to fix a marriage, this is it. The moment he had a confession of criminal intent on tape he should have gone to his sister and had her take care of it. Then he confronts his wife with everything and demands that she fix it. If she doesn't then divorce. She loved him so much she believed others before confronting him. She would have to prove her love after that. Good stupid story.

I would have a hard time forgetting trying to tie me up and fuck in front of me, rest was o.k.

There was no rational reason to throw in the attempted revenge fuck and how easily he took her back after that but I still hope you continue to write in this genre; you are one of the really refreshing new authors.

Read every word of it.

As they've said the revenge fuck was a little out of context, but otherwise, what a great story

This is the way REAL people behave! Heavily flawed, stupid, stubborn, vengeful, plug in a few more! These characters are familiar from my own experience. Pieces of reality, grains of truth. Oh yes, Pat drinks way too much!

with the services of an editor.<p>I don't mean the writing, which I liked rather a lot, or the thread of the story, which I found quite serviceable.<p>No, what I didn't like was the length. You could have removed about 33% of this material and tightened it up quite nicely. There were, to my way of thinking, too many scenes which repeated parts of other scenes.<p>Also, Olivia was not believable to me. Mothers-in-law, well, yeah, they can be a pain; but she was too vicious and vindictive for not enough clearly-defined reason. (Maybe some more backstory would have helped.) Anyway, it made the ending a little too melodramatic for my taste. I also think she'd have done at least some hard time for what strikes me as attempted premeditated murder. <p>Nice work, but too much of a good thing for me.

Excellent story. It could stand some editing (a bit too much "fluff" as well) but VERY good read all in all. Thanks.

Kept my attention and interest through each and every page. Sure, the characters are a bit too dramatic but they're clearly drawn, and they act in accordance with the images of them that the author so skillfully created. It's good authorship, and it's the strength of the work.

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The central conflict is well done, and the presence of two impact characters, Olivia and Ted, keeps the tension in the plot high. That creates good narrative drive which makes the read go quickly. The resolution of the conflict is smoothly handled and gives the story a feel-good ending.

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A finely wrought and well-told Loving Wives tale. Thank you.

well plotted,well written ,well done.

and I appreciated the work that went into tracing out Pat and his daughters. I have to admit that I thought that his idea to see if she would let Bowman in or not, terrible and if it came out later, it would be a reason leave him. I do not understand why Ash did not flay him alive for throwing her mother to the wolves. On the other hand, the revenge fuck idea was again prima facie reason for a divorce. Revenge fucks only make sence when the other partner has allowed it and certainly not with them tied up. I was expecting heroics from Ash at the end. Thanks!

<p>OK, let me say this first: You can write a really interesting and engaging tale. I mean I got so much into it I didn't notice how much time slipped away from me</p>

<p>For that I thank you for writing such a decent story that I've not seen in days</p>

<p>But on the other hand, I didn't like how cliche' you resolved the two of them. I had no problem with the story up to the point where the wife comes back into the hospital room and tells the husband that she is so sorry but she can't live without him, that she has to have him in her life. Or when she picks him up from the hospital and takes him home. But when she tells him to take some pills that will knock him out. "THEN" she goes out, gets drunk, and is in the process of trying to tie him to the bed so he has a front row seat to her cheating on him. Not something she plans to do in secret (like his supposed affair) but where she is <i><b>forcing</b></i> him to watch while being restrained unable to leave till she's done and she's ready to let him. Where not more than "hours" before she was begging him to not leave her. Where he tells her he'll give her the divorce, and she tearfully begs him to reconsider, but it appears that was only a ruse to keep him close enough to witness her revenge on him. And how it gets resolved is her finding out she was setup, her expected crying for him to forgive her, and of course where he takes her back because her tears breaks his heart, and this becomes a stronger marriage than ever before???</p>

<p>If my wife tied me to a bed, after bringing another man into our bed room where she was trying to tie me down, I doubt quick tears would make me pretend that never happened, or make my marriage much stronger than before. Even if she was tricked, "that" action would be all of her choosing to do and not something she was forced into.</p>

<p>While I'm all for someone, anyone, being the bigger person, he was the total innocent in your story. She was innocent at first. But when the story has her taking steps to deceive him into believing she has forgiven him, while she believed him unable to stop her, so she can get revenge on him while forcing him to watch, then once she figured out he was never cheating on her, she cries and when the family and friend(s) then announces that he'll be the bad guy if he doesn't forgive her made me dislike both her and his character.</p>

<p>I'm not saying that she shouldn't be forgiven, but the story said that she had been treating him bad for, I believe, four months. Then once she saw pictures she went over the top. But her actions were all her own. It went on for pages on her actions, but only, what, 3/4's a page on her crying and him taking her back without a second thought? Crying doesn't counter balance what she had been doing to him for months, and it certainly didn't balance out her trying to tie him to a bed</p>

<p>I liked the page up till the 2nd to last page. Then I didn't like the characters anymore and/or the ending. But I swear I liked everything up to that point.</p>

<p>Sorry</p>

-Risq

You may not be Ernest Hemingway, but your story was one of the few good ones that I have read on Literotica. I think some folks expected this to be like a Hemingway novel, but this isn't the place for it. Besides that, I don't particularly like Hemingway's work. This story was refreshing because it didn't jump into sex in the first sentence, the first paragraph or even in the story. So, as the Eagles would say, "Get Over It".

that I continued to read all the rest of your stories. It has been a very entertaining evening. I'm looking forward to reading more in the future.

I can not complain about anyones writing. Mine isn't any good anyway. But I think it was a good read. The wife perhaps could and should have at least talked to the husband about what she found out. But the case was pretty solid from the mother-in-laws side. So I can't really say the wife was a fool. With the information she was given it looked an open and shut case. The only thing that I don't understand is the husband is a strong minded person. Why didn't he sort out the mother-in-law a long time ago. Anyway good story. Keep writing. I look forward to your next story.

This story is a new low in pathetically stupid. <b> In the end the fact is that after 22 years Dani would give her own husband 1 second to explain. Forgiving Dani... however fucking crazy that is... doesnt explain away that fact.</b>

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After Patrick beats up Ted and throws the Tape recording at Dani...Patrick mentions JUST 1 time that Dani was going to Tie him up and force him to watch Ted Fuck her.

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Patrick never tells the two grown daughters. WHY is that? How does Patrick over look a 22 year character flaw that result in DANI willing to tie him up... and take her back.??

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it makes no sense. The plot is stupid filled with irrational actions from the HUSBAND... the wife and her mother are both fucking crazy.

5th grade girls whose hormones are just coming on and 5th grade boys who, by and large, are still playing with GI Joe and Rambo toys, who are playing John Wayne roles. <p>

It's mostly tired, cliched, and gibberish nonsense.

Glad I read this one. This is a well written story and I really enjoyed it. He went a bit to easy on them with the attempt to tie him up but oh well... That is really very little to worry about, a very good story that makes me want to read the rest of your work.

A bit convoluted, but delightful reading. Written well, and logically presented. -- KK in Texas

Its a fabulous written story and the plot is OK with but there are some SERIOUS plot holes.

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To begin with None of this makes any sense. Its fucking laughable. Once he had the tape confession of Crystal and ted... why not go right over Dani's parents house kick in the door play the tape then Leave?

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Who care if or when she fucks TED or not?

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Recall the scene where Patrick beats up Ted and he gives te Tape to Dani.. Patrick only mentions that 1 time to ... and that was to his father in law.

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In the reconciliation / forgiveness scene that act... of Dani willing to tie him against will-- a FELONY crime... and TORTURE Patrick by forcing him to watch is never even talked about 1 time.

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Patrick never mentions it to Dani or to their daughters.

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Sorry author you fucked this one up BIG time

Started out great, but gradually became unbelievable, and with the scene where Dani was tying him up, it became a caricature. Sometimes less is more.

real. Many families live these types of lives in some degree or another and think it how i should be. I rated the story down because of the ending. I would in no way, cant think of a single reason to, accept the wife back. For knowing over the years what her mother had tried to do over and over and falling for it again is not realistic or mentally stable. Put another way, it seems mental unstability runs in her family line and is sex linked. To accuse someone of something but not say what or how, and then to refuse to allow someone you love and has loved you for over twenty years is unrealistic. The revenge fuck while drunk in front of her husband after she attempted to get him overdosed with drugs and tying him up is a series of criminal offenses. She and Bowman belong in jail. How everyone knew to go to that particular bar is really silly. And even more silly is the grandfather wife and daughter going regularly to the hospital to meet with a criminally insane person who attempted to ruin all of hteir lives. Your main character in the story is an alcoholic and needs help with that. No way can anyone who is such a talented civil engineer going to be an alcoholic and be successful as described. The story was good, the ending was warped to give a reconciliation at any cost!

Screw the critics, I liked the story. Keep writing. LOL

P.S. I did get kinda spooked when the wife tried to tie up her husband and screw her boyfriend in front of him. That part was a little weird.

the ending. First, you have Dani returning to Pat's side following his head injury whebn she tell him that she refused Bowman's advances and they go home apparently reconciled. Then Dani calls Bowman for this revenge fuck, she atempts to drug her injured husband and get him tied up. Even if the affair was true forciing your spouse to see you fuck someone else is sadistic. Taking drugs with a head injury may have placed his life in danger. The other thing that bothered me was the month long period between Crystal's "confession" and then she blew up. Dani's mother had nothing to do with that. She suspected that Pat ruined her date with Bowman but there only resentment not the relief she would feel if this was something she grudgingly agreed to. Pat was right -Dani is exactly like her mother! My queston is why would you or anyine want to spend the rest of their life with that kind of person? As a partner wouldn't this type of behavior result in immediate termination from the firm? Pat was too good for her!

...overall quite satisfactory. I too thought that the revenge fuck device was over the top and unnecessary. Even though she didn't succeed, the intent was as bad as the deed. I don't know if I could have forgiven that. Making her drunk at the time was no excuse. Still, even though this may have been her idea, I could see the mother's influence causing this. I know the mother ends up in a psychiatric hospital, but I would insist that Dani go in for some intensive therapy before taking her back. There must be an underlying reason that Broomhilda had such control of her after so many years of marriage. All in all, though, a good read. An editor would have helped, but I didn't find this a major problem.

Like so many of the "Loving Wives" writers on this site, you never make the case of WHY the cheated husband should take the offending wife back. MAYBE (and I do mean maybe) if she hadn't attempted to restrain him after setting him up in the hospital) there was a chance initially. But to quote, I believe, Kanga, "you drop them from anything higher than the second floor, you can't hope for a recovery". When will you guys realize that a "Happy ending" does not have to include the couples staying together?

I thought it was a good story and liked it. I'll read more of yours and will look for new ones. Thanks.

Liked the story, not bad, but I suspect in real life the bitch would have gotten the divorce she so richly deserved. Even love has limits.

it was one of hell of a story and i loved how the husband wasnt going to take crap from anybody, but wtf was with that ending? after everything she did, she then twisted that knife a little deeper when she almost tied hubby up and banged another man in front of him! that right there should tell you she has a screw loose and the guy before me was right, a happy ending doesnt necessarily mean the couple stays together. you gave the impression that he was one hell of a man, with willpower to spare but then you have him break down in the end and completely forgive his wife and everybody lived happily ever after. what complete crap.

Well written, but should have divorced the bitch, sued the m-inlaw for alienation of affection (along with the scuzbag bf to be) and moved along smartly with life. She shit all over trust and loyalty and deserved much worse than she got. No, I'm not one of those reconcilliation at any cost kind of guys.....

...I can understand why Pat relented and resumed life with Dani, but no more was said about her and Ted's plan to copulate in front of Pat to punish him. I thought that would have at least been mentioned in their final discussion. Oh Well! Great story! Jim

Can't believe there's a story like this on a site like this!! I seriously want to see this in a movie-form or something. Great Job!!!!!

For me, the plot stands at the top of the hierarchy of importance among the different elements which comprise fiction. Therefore, nice writing style is certainly a plus, but it can never compensate, moreover – it does nothing to me as long as the foundation, namely –the plot, is incoherent, implausible or if it fails to create an emotional response with the reader. <P>

I concur with Risq and others who could not swallow the ending which felt like it came from nowhere. You want to build for a reconciliation story AND be praised by all readers? Ok, maybe not all, but at least those who appreciate GOOD stories… No problem, PREPARE for it right from the start in the way you characterize both of the main characters. In fiction ALL that we know is from you – and unless we have SOMETHING to build on at an earlier point, so that we could have the expectation (or the basis to look back and recognize in hind sight) that the husband might be amenable to tolerate extreme mental/psychological abuse and humiliation; vulnerable to manipulations and flimsy excuses not smart enough to recognize them even in hind sight – then how do you expect the reader to buy the husband’s grand gesture of forgiveness based only on shedding tears, begging and promises (all gestures which could be genuine or not) without settling first–at least with your readers, this seemingly suicidal leap of faith he is making right back into the arms of his tormentor? The husband might have somehow turned at the last page into a dummy but the readers have not… <P>

In other words you have to SHOW us what happened to CHANGE the husband’s character and mindset. THEN –I guarantee you, even the most acrobatic ending you could think of, would be applauded.

Seems the mental illnesses are genetic in the women of that family. The dear wife refused to believe anything anyone intelligent told her. And she actually removed herself from the marriage with no communication, what is it women say about men? She actually dated without concern evidenced about caring for her marriage and it was only by her husband intervening she wasnt bedded the first time. The grandmother is big time nuts. The husband may be an engineer but isnt very smart. The differences between him and his motherinlaw were apparent and he should have found a way for his wife to have ended the problems. The daughters are actually wishywashy in their feelings towards their parents, backing one then the other with no real consideration of facts. Divorce was the only viable outcome of this scenario.

but i think that the kids needed to know more of the details, esp about their mom trying to tie him up while he was drugged. as crazy as it all went down, that was probably the biggest betrayal and would have been hardest for me to get over. in the end, she never did sleep with richy rich boy and of course she wants to believe her mom, especialy with the evidence presented, but to take advantage of her husband when she thinks he's drugged is pretty much inexcusable to me. still, it's just fiction and i liked the story. to bad there wasn't more of a payback for richy rich, after all he did try to drug the wife!

Several stories seem to have a plot element where the wife gets revenge by tying up the husband and forcing him to watch her have sex with someone. In this story the wife tries to do this without ever knowing for sure that her husband was unfaithful. She hasn't talked with him, hasn't shown him the photos and demanded an explanation. If he had been screwing around, then he might not be as affected by her actions as she hoped. The only way he would be completely devastated is if he were innocent. I have a hard time believing that a woman who loved her husband would do that to him without at least talking to him first, showing the photos, and getting him to admit the affair. Just seems so unlikely. The author need to do a better job with the wife's character to get you to believe this.

Your female characters seem to all have some serious be psychological quirks. Do you really think that is how women behave? I didn't understand why Patrick always had to get blind, blackout drunk everytime he had a problem to deal with. The "watch me screw your wife" episode was unnecessary and confusing and resulted in many loose strings to the story line. The ending was hurried and not acceptable. This story didn't seem to be up to your normal standards. anon jerry

I loved it, forget these that say its not realistic. Truth is always stranger than fiction. Was a great story. Thank you

What started out as a great story deteriorated at the end . Dumbo knows the whole story but he is not going to tell his wife the facts nor is he going to let anyone ellse tell her about her evil mother. I get tired of stories dependent on refusal to communicate with each other. Try another stereotype next time.

60 year old George

For GODS sake, the bitch was going to fuck the asswipe right in front of him. NO MATTER what else happened he could NEVER accept her back in his life. WHAT a DUMMY wimp.

You did such a great job describing Dan's complete loss of trust in her husband and the despicable actions she takes against him, particularly trying to screw Bowwoman in front of her husband. Her actions went too far and went on for far too long. She did not communicate: she ranted and raved and ASSSSUMED he had cheated without any discussion on very flimsy evidence. No reconciliation seems possible. Big love? You just did not describe conditions where forgiveness makes sense. No matter how a writer like his characters, when you establish this much reality, stick to reality.

A mechanical engineer works on engines, motors, pulleys, things that move!

A civil engineer builds bridges, roads, houses, buildings.

You have other mistakes, but this is where I leave it.

....When a large construction project is undertaken both Mech E's and Civ E's will be needed, if for no other reason then to make sure the equipment is in order. Harry right again with comments. Good try.

It's completely unthinkable for him to reconcile with his wife JUST like that moments after her telling him that they're good and she still loves him... and she returns with another man to humiliate him! WTF?? It only didn't happen because they didn't know he heard before he managed to break the prick's wrist! It's a part of the plot that spoils the story.. Why? Because he's meant to be a strong character with lots of morals. He ALREADY got back with her once, and then a second time so soon after a real betrayal?? Not completing the act is still the same betrayal! She didn't stop voluntarily, she was FORCED to stop! The timetable just seems too fast - reconciliation a second time JUST by looking at her? His hardboiled shell cracked? I don't think so - not for a second time at the hospital AGAIN, no less! Other than that, it WAS a great fucking story, regardless of whatever other issues people like or don't like about it.

He put the wife to the test. She came up wanting but he forgave her. The story is based on Patrick not telling the wife what was really going on. A very fictional scenario I think. Why risk losing a loving wife because she jumps to a conclusion when her judgment is impaired by the emotions of an apparent betrayal?

Can anyone write a story about men with balls

who belongs in the loony bin, rest of the family should have adjoining rooms

I would have preferred the story ending with him leaving her for good.

I suppose it's because everyone here is an amateur author. But in a well crafted story, the anger when he talks about divorcing his wife because of this incident, but also because he's always come in 2nd behind her mother for 20 years, wouldn't just dissipate in 10 seconds. The ending was rushed. The wife attempts to do something really despicable, and he completely forgives her after a minute or two of venting. For a reader it's not nearly enough. It should take a bit more to reconcile, if reconciliation is to be. After all, attempting to tie up your spouse in order to make him watch you have sex with another is pretty much a marriage breaker for most couples.

A good story, well told, with a satisfying ending.

That mother-in-law needed to be committed.

It was, for me, a well written and engaging story, right up until the revenge cliche. She fakes her love, takes him home, gets him to take the pain killers and then is going to fuck Ted on the bed beside him. You went too far. Up until that point I could see love winning out, but with that she became just a mini me of her mother, and you had that bitch totally crazy. Good story author, but you screwed the pooch with that silly add on.

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You idiots!! Dani is fully prepared to have him bound and than to fuck her "lover" in front of him. Happy ending! Bullshit. Ball-less husband. Bitch mother-in-law should of shot Dani and then herself. Now a happy ending. Just a typical man-hating tale.

Unlike the previous commenter I appreciate the elements you have in the story. This story was about marital trust. But what happens when a trust even older than the marriage (parental) is manipulated by someone that really doesn't have your own interests in mind? The wife was one of the victims in this whole charade. With a MIL that was willing to have evil done to her up to and including drugged rape it is a wonder she survived as intact as she did.

I would have liked to see the cockolding boyfriend wannabe get his at a much more serious level. The two badguys were the mother and law and boyfriend wannabe. both got off too easy.

Great fun read in a matt helm, dirk pitt way...

Only negative point is you should have left out the scene where Dani tried to bind him and fuck the sleaze-bag. In my opinion it strained the boundaries of believability a little to much. Even If he had fucked Crystal a few years bag that was over the top as revenge, much less when you consider all the other circumstances like "I don't talk to you" Without this point the Story is believable but If I were Pat I certainly had problems taking her back "because she really loves me" after that CRUEL stunt.

I have read this twice and your commenters are right. I really do like this story, but you ruined it with the drugging and tying him up scene where she "Would" have fucked Ted. She actually plotted falsely acted a part of the loving wife. Just to make him think everything was ok so she could have revenge sex in front of him? That is a revenge scene used for when you have given up on the marriage and she was trying to make the divorce final by destroying her husband's love for her!

I wish the story could be rewritten where that part is left out. Then you would have a "Great" story where we could still love and respect Dani as a victim. She was not the victim during that part of the story at all!

She was acting just like her Mother... I know that we readers cannot change a story after the fact, but you or somebody else could!

And Dani is Stupid and he does Dani. Typical flakey female!! God if Sheep could only cook we would be rid of these scabs! Thank heavens for those few normal gals we are lucky enough to find!!

Old folks

He is one of the most insightful commenters on LW.

He also is right on about this story. Too many elements copied from other stories. Dani is poorly characterized; too many conflicting personality elements.

DWorock is one sick puppy. His psychotic comments come from a pre-teenage mind.

good family values always trump...TK U MLJ LV NV

None of the primary characters are all that stable heh - sorta like real life actually -

RonR is sorta right here but then we are asked to accept that the daughter was successfully manipulated by the single most influential person in her life - her mother - perfectly plausible - her behavior was like her role model again not implausible - just horribly unfortunate.

So Pat decides to forgive her the one most egregious example of this since she has apparently learned better (unlike mom) - I am OK with that - it wasn't easy and that seems real too.

Nicely done I enjoyed the read even if I do not think I would follow quite the same path.

Rephil is right, it is a WACC story. Come on after all the shit he went through with his fucked up wife, who btw after he leaves the hospital plans to tie him up and fuck another man to get even, and you guys want him to end up with a evil slut like that. Learn what lesson, she didn't learn shit. She was never punished, like your typical cuckold he took her back. A stupid, stupid, stupid man.

they can also cast spells. TK U MLJ LV NV

Fantastic. Very good fictional drama. I loved it. Way to go!!!

Characters were shallow, no reason to sympathize with any of them, except maybe the daughters. The author and lead male are both evidently drunk alcoholics, Irish or not. This is a composite of many LW stories and a poor one at that.

Lazy writers slosh booze around in their stories; that doesn't make the story "like real life" as some commenters state. The whole premise of this story and the other LW stories with the same theme of not confronting the spouse when untrue accusations are made is garbage. The use of "love tests" is way overdone in LW literature. Oh well, shallow is as shallow does.

Wow that poor spineless bloke.

I feel sorry for the daughters because Dani has already displayed that she is as crazy as her bitch of a mom, won't be long till Dani decides the spouses of her daughters aren't good enough and pulls the same shit. Honestly the bitch(Dani) was going to drug him bond him then fuck another guy right in front of him after he just got out of the hospital smells like a crazy bitch that needs to be divorced to me.

Taking back a wife prepared to tie him up and cheat in front of him??? B.S. Perhaps, at best, remain "friends" after the divorce but, other than that, no way.

For a fun read. A great story

Why take back a woman who not only doesn't trust you, but drugs you to get her revenge. Setting aside that it's a felony, several actually, under what circumstances would you trust someone like that again ?

Of all the things that make up a marriage, isn't trust the most important ?

Also, the main character was very "screw her" right up until the end. And then he just reversed himself ? There needed to be a more credible turning point to explain his change of heart. I felt it missing.

Oh, and to pick a nit -- drugging someone who suffered a serious head injury is a really bad idea.

The wife in this story was an asshole who was going to torture her husband without giving him a chance to defend himself. She deserves to be kicked to the curb. I wouldn't be able to stand the sight of her. 1 star!

With flaws. I love happy endings and I understand simply having him confront Dani with the truth was too easy and.lessened the story (I suspect most hubs would confront the wife,knowing that would likely break mommy's hold) but the end was too easy,it happened too fast and too easy.How would hubby believe Dani was genuine after pulling the stunt with teddie boy?She got him to believe she cared then was going to torture him and he will just forgive and forget that easily?I also agree he should have told the daughters the truth of what happened,if anything so they wouldn't blame him. I also don't know why he would try to stop his d's from badmouthing the hag bc it would hurt dani.....I could see him taking dani. back

After making her work to prove she was worth it, but especially coming from a fsmily of cops he wouldn't likely forgive the drugging and attempted torture.

Olivia is easy to read,she was some stupid bitch who wanted to social climb and wanted dani to do it for her,plenty of people like that.She saw Pat as some loser (note dani's family is methodist,pat irish catholic,the old wasp disdane) even though.he proved to be a good provider.....and thought a trust fund loser was worth more.

If my wife had drugged me, tied me up, and was going to make me watch her screw another man right in front of me, I don't think I'd be saying no harm no foul honey less than 24 hours later. What the author should have done was have Patrick hire an escort and make his wife watch. Tell her it's either that or divorce. Maybe that would get through to her. If she couldn't accept it then she's the world's biggest hypocrite. She was going to commit adultery in front of her husband. She deemed that a fitting punishment for him. So like they say, what's good for the goose is good for the gander. Would having to watch destroy their marriage? It would for me, but how much of a marriage did they have? Evidently she'd been pulling this shit for years. This needs to be a wake up call, but how can it be if he doesn't send her a message?

I wouldn't take her back.

Thanks for sharing.

i realize you wanted to stretch this story out, but dont do it by turning the husband into a woman.

This story was far too long and seemed to be a mishmash of a bunch of other stories so as such I only gave it two stars.

When he thought they were making up, hubby asked, "Dani, is everything good between us now?" His loving wife lied right to his face. The next thing our hero knows, she's brought her boyfriend back so they could screw in front of the tied up husband. This betrayal is far more cruel and outrageous than her original leap to a bad conclusion. Unfortunately, the issue is never dealt with. I could believe a reconciliation over the 'affair' but my suspension of disbelief just couldn't handle the extra load when hubby just lets it go.

but why take her back, the mom, the daughter, the wife, the wife's friend...jezzzz what woman isnt trying to fuck him over.

When Dani tried to tie her husband up and cuck him that would be the end. She was as nutty as her mom and should have been in the nut house with her.

But why would Patrick take her back? She didn't believe him when he said there was no affair , shit she wouldn't even talk to him, she opted to screaming & telling him to get the fuck out.... She didn't trust him even though they'd been married for 20 something years, she chose her mother over him, she chosed to believe her mother over him... I'm really not seeing why he'd want her back? It doesn't seem worth it to me... She drugged him, tied him up & was in the process of fucking Ted when he stopped it, all of these events scream divorce the bitch shes not worth it... I'm sorry but I would no longer wish to stay married to a bitch like that I don't give two shits how long we'd been married... Unless dani is a complete moron she had to have known that her mother might've set him up especially since her bitch of a mother made it clear that she hated Patrick, why was it so easy for her to believe her husband would sleep with her bestfriend but she couldn't believe her mother was trying to fuck up her marriage? There shouldn't have been any reconciliation no way ! Her actions was just crazy.

why would Patrick take her back? She didn't believe him when he said there was no affair , shit she wouldn't even talk to him, she opted to screaming & telling him to get the fuck out.... She didn't trust him even though they'd been married for 20 something years, she chose her mother over him, she chosed to believe her mother over him... I'm really not seeing why he'd want her back? It doesn't seem worth it to me... She drugged him, tied him up & was in the process of fucking Ted when he stopped it, all of these events scream divorce the bitch shes not worth it... I'm sorry but I would no longer wish to stay married to a bitch like that I don't give two shits how long we'd been married... Unless dani is a complete moron she had to have known that her mother might've set him up especially since her bitch of a mother made it clear that she hated Patrick, why was it so easy for her to believe her husband would sleep with her bestfriend but she couldn't believe her mother was trying to fuck up her marriage? There shouldn't have been any reconciliation no way ! Her actions was just crazy.

Im all for reconcilliation but she should'vd done more to apologize he 4gave her 2 quick

His wife trying to fuck another man in front of him. If it

were you, would you just shrug that off? It would take more than

a couple of I'm sorries and a few tears to get over that.

I greatly enjoyed this story, even though there was no wild sex. The plot was good with twists enough to keep one's attention. Continue writing and keep up the good work.

Interesting plot, good characterisation, too.

With lots of twists... Oliva is one queen bitch!

although I was searching to jack off to, I found this story to be very appealing and couldn't stop reading. There were twist and turns throughout. You are a fine writer. I enjoyed reading this story very much.

She should be his ex wife now!

The attempted revenge fuck was a step too far and crossed the line from insanely l

jealous to just insane. You have it almost happen and then it is never brought up again. Decent story, but that messed it up

Great story and the characters are especially appealing . However, Pat could have easily shortcut a lot of the crap that developed by simply playing the tape for Dani after he recorded it or letting his daughters convince their mother . Also, the revenge fuck was over the top. Still, I loved it . Creative and well written .

after telling her about her mothers plan and seduction .she still went foward with her plain to seduce bowman. .after getting to tie him up and witness her having sex with bowman this marriage should have ended. that was too much and way over the top..no way you could forgive her at that point..so there the story died.

right up to the revenge fuck. He should have broken Ted's wrist, both of them, and then kicked Dani's ass out to the curb. What a pussy fucked wimp.

The story was well written and the plot had plenty of interesting turns. The whole issue of the revenge fuck is never adequately dealt with before they reconcile. I think they could have still gotten over it, but leaving it out of the equation was a major omission that almost killed the story. I have learned one thing in reading these kind of stories: if reconciliation is your end goal, make sure you don't dig a hole so deep it is impossible to climb out of. She deceived him in the hospital by pretending to forgive him, gave him drugs that were meant to knock him out, was in the process of tying him to the bed so that she could fuck Ted in front of him ... Really? And he just forgets this and forgives her, without so much as throwing it in her face? Again, I think it was still something they could have gotten past - the father in laws words were true: she was as much a victim as Pat. However, that's a 300 pound gorilla in the room that has to be addressed.

I could buy a revenge flunk, that turned out to be revenge for nothing. But to believe he'd ever, ever forget that his wife had tried to tie him down so she could force him to watch her screw. No last minute change of heart- she dragged him to the bed. Even a saint couldn't live with that.

no way i would take her back.. that was over the top and for the author to let her back into life was a mistake..

WHAT A JOKE ...

Pat lied, "Why couldn't you just listen to me, let me show you, Dani. I could have proved they were phonies but you wouldn't give me the chance...."

But if I recall correctly (and I do), when Dani gave Pat the opportunity to make his case, he never did. In fact, all he ever did was tell Dani to get a lawyer, because he was through with her.

Olivia should have killed Pat instead of monologuing, so that Dani would have the chance to get with someone she could trust for once in her life.

If Dan was the husband, and Pat was his wife, then who would the BTB crowd pile their hate on? You know, you dense hypocrites. It's weird that the author had every character Pat came in contact with warn him that he was in the wrong, but so many of the commenters missed that.

... even though it was an easy read none of the characters were believable. Zero, not the husband, not the wife, not the mother in law, not the father in law, not the children, not even "Black Mike", you should have started the story "once upon a time" because the ending was a fairy tale.

Panther Fan.