All Comments on 'Deep Magic'

Billy is a woman-hater, all women are sluts to be used. Was that secret before the orange mist?

How about another one with more incest and adultery?

A reasonable story. a bit derivative, but also somewhat imaginative. A few obvious errors, but, on the whole. far better than some other authors' work.

History Class (history class)

She swallowed it down her throat (AS OPPOSED TO WHERE)

stand anymore pleasure (anymore)

blast landed shot up (AWKWARD WORDING)

needs to be fuck (fucked)

finally feel asleep I a heap on the floor (fell) (in)