All Comments on 'Delayed Action'

Fabulous. Absolutely the best story I've read in longer than I can remember. I thought Camera Bug was the best until I read this. I can't wait to see what Laurie does next. Great name by the way. Giggle.

By far the best I've read on Litirotica!!!!!

Funny, poignant, sexy ----- does it all.

I'm stunned! This was brilliant. Hotter than Camera Buff, more fun than Santa Sex Addict! I loved it!!!! It got me wet.

Very good hope you follow up with more chapters here. Was dispointed when there were more chapters on Camera Buff.

Amazing story, carried me along with it, Both Bill and Laurie were mad for each other for their first ever Lovemaking, I say lovemaking because it was tender a loving by both of them and not just sex.

You did an amazing job of bringing every touch and taste of the two in your story, I enjoyed it very much and will look for other stories you write.

Thanks!

You have entered the small number of literotica authors that I remember their names and will keep checking them up for new submissions.

I've read every thing and will really like to read more, especially the developments of all of the story lines you already published.

this was hot... so very great, well developed, Hope you will continue to develop the story!

I hope you will continue to develop this story along with Camera Buff

Sorry about the '5', but they aren't set up for tens.

Thanks!

I'm definitely a fan of your stories. This one, like the camera one is great! Only thing you may add is more vivid description of the bodies and the sex itself. But I love how the stories make me think of what a firm pair of tits on a thin body with a shapely ass did to me when I was a teen (and still does today).

The genuine way you articulate the insecurity and self-talk makes the stories feel real and identifies with my youth. You do a great job of having the guy learn the girls bodies and find how to pleasure her and not just go for the quick erotic description, keep that up.

Loved your story, Can't wait to see how Bill nails Millie!!

The story leads me to believe that Bill's Mom knew what she was doing when she has Laurie over for four hours. I think she's still doing some home schooling!

Laurie Bonner= Laurie Boner

Bill Pantier= Bill Panty-er

I like all the stories so far set at this school. Not so over the top that it makes you disbelieve, but still incredibly sexy. Loved it!

enjoyed this story would be better if you carried it on.

dude... ur gifted. Nice work!

nice piece of work. enjoyed it very much. please continue the story.

As Beningle stated you should write a follow up of this super hot story. Totally enjoyed it. 5 stars doesn't do it justice.

the story was beautifully written and very very interesting and i adored it... But... I simply detest u wth each and every fiber of my being for not making a nice tidy series continuing his adventures into the newly discoverd land of sex... So if u dont wish 2 incur more of my wrath and certainly that of any1 els who has the pleasure of reading this... Write a sequel and keep writing

I loved Laurie's clever comments and jokes ("No way. He has a hook"). A very nice balance between character development and sex, very, very, erotic sex.

The reader does have to suspend belief vis a vis an almost 19 year-old male not knowing what masturbation or an orgasm is, or that he is so skilled, first time out, but so what. After all, it is a fantasy. Sort of like, "Alice in Wonderland," with a different spin.

I'll echo the comments about the desirability of a sequel. I think "Billy" should get a shot at that girl in his Algebra class. God knows he needs to see if he can help her have more than the 148 orgasms that Laurie had ;-).

Great job. Thanks.

Bravo bravo. Now wheres the encore?

A most excellent story. Well-crafted and full of style. You have a wonderfully fresh talent for this kind of writing; it's clear that you enjoy it as much as your readers do.

If you haven't published a novel or a collection of short stories yet, I encourage you to consider it. Thank you.

Do continue Billy's trsyts with Millie and Laurie as well... Wonderful storyline...

Great story - I really enjoyed it!

You have a very well written talent I want to see how he fucks Millie

So well written and straight to the point. Loved the characters!

Never have I commented on this site before, but well done. Not only did this story make me wet, by the end of it, I also felt very proud of Bill! I'd love to see something become of him and Laurie, they seem so good together.

Another good job. Love your writing but it's going to be hard to beat "Camera Buff". Guess I'm on to "Field Trip Follies" and looking forward to it and more from you. Keep up the good work!

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You totally nailed it on the head with your description of a first-time experience! Well done!

I've read many dirty stories in my days, but none as good as this. You're quite talented, and I can't wait to read Camera Buff!

The title says it all. If a picture is worth a thousand words, this story is worth a thousand pictures!

Thanks for the wonderful story. Very enjoyable and I am looking forward to reading other stories of yours. Thanks from all of us.

That was incredible, it took a lot of lotion...but I made it through to the glorious conclusion.

I read Camera Buff first, and thought it was GREAT, but THIS blew it out of the water! Fantastic!

Aside from the fact that this is one of the most well-written and entertaining stories I've ever read on Literotica, I found your description of Bill's journey of sexual discovery to be incredibly accurate. I grew up sheltered, raised by extremely religious parents, and my own experience with masturbation and eventually cumming for the first time was remarkably similar to Bill's. (Except I didn't have a hot, teenage flag girl to show me the ropes!) Well done!

I also read Camera Buff first and thought it was great, but you've raised the bar with this. I'd love to read Chapter 2 about Millie if you ever get around to it.

You need to have another chapter. Billy is a character that you can continue writing more stories about. Not the typical 'coming of age' stuff. Great story!

Man this was one of best! You must write more chapters about this story!

Aaaaaaaaawesome! Great job! Loved it.

Great story... would like to see how things develop with Millie!!

You have a real talent for creating great female characters like Rona and Laurie. They are a bit sassy and confident and know what they want. I also like the male characters too, so with characters that are much more realistic than in most stories on this site you are already way far ahead. Great story lines and always well written with dialogue that works.

I really enjoy reading, and re-reading your stories. Please write some more with these characters.

Thank you so much !

It needs more! I want to follow as Billy's high school progression, as his meds take affect and he grows into the man he's meant to be, he continues his passionate love affair with Laurie, and eventually the two of them are joined by Millie. M0ar

Great writing. Kept a boner through the whole story. Your girls make me crazy and take me back in time to remember fantasies I'd almost forgotten.

I would very much love to see this story continued. While the ultimate decision is up to you, Im pretty confident that many other people as well as I, would love to see a second and maybe third installment

Just finished Delayed Action and Camera Buff 1 & 2 . Enjoyed them both. Nice change of story lines from the standard fare.

Sensual and "laugh my ass off funny"? Came here after Camera Buffs (where's #3).

Personally I don't think Millie deserves a chance, Laurie and Bill should keep getting closer & closer together, eventually realizing that it's their past that prepared them to be exactly where they are. I mean c'mon; can she really walk-away from a guy who can go for more than 2 hours and get her off a dozen times, loving every second of it! OK; so they might have to give someone else a chance to realize that no one else compares; but sometimes that's what it takes to get your attention. .... DKP

Ah, the Laurie Bonner's of this world are what makes life worth living if you are straight guy. She combines the best of playful sexuality and and yet almost innocent sweetness that is pretty much irresistible.

I SO needed to meet her in high school.

I appreciated her "guest shot" in Field Trip Follies, but that series, while it definitely had some very hot moments, turned into a little too much of a crowded orgy for me.

Oh well, Cie la Vie.

Impressive! Definitely needs to be continued, would love to read more on how Bill's learning curve (awakening) progresses.

The first story of yours I read was Camera Buff. I've read hundreds of stories here but your work remains a favorite. I enjoy the awkward characters and well paced passion. You truly write a good old story that happens to have some good old fucking in it. Thanks so much. ToJeep.

Just a great story. No ifs; no buts

Me giving a story on here a five is such a rarity that I honestly can't remember the last time that I did. Wow! There were a few typos, but for the most part the story was so well written, engaging and flat out amazingly erotically entertaining that I couldn't put my iPad down for a second!

The only improvement I could possibly see would be follow up chapters! Everything was totally believable and perfectly within the realm of possibility. (I went to private school for highschool (still mad as shit at my parents over that and Im in my fourties now!) and there was *no* sex education, if I hadn't gotten that in junior high I would have been totally fucking ignorant. (I was super shy back then, leaving home to go to college, dial-up internet, chat boards and house parties with online friends and running across girls who wanted to do naughty things to me cured me of that!)

...however I dont really get the pain before orgasm thing... But him lasting over 1-1/2 hour is totally believable, I've always, even getting started, been at least a 45 minute minimum guy. ...My first time was kind of similar on some points, though my girl was hardly a semi-virgin, lol. ;)

Please keep writing! Now I need to check out your other stuff! Thanks for a great story!!

M@

You made it hot but kept it believable too. You also had very few errors. Thanks

You turn out some hot stories, CBS. Guess I was born 70 years too soon. The girls in "my day" were influenced by mothers who had their heads in the Victorian era. Shit happens -- a lot. Cheers!

Holy shit...I haven't even read the story yet. After the first couple of paragraphs though when the author described himself feeling Millie's ass on his leg in Algebra! Her name was Maria for me and it was Algebra 1; not 2, 9th grade, and I did the same thing every day...I'm 42 now and I still remember the feeling of her bottom on my leg...she never moved away and never said a word; only now and then she'd push back...sigh...

Every reader was baked in to enjoyment through out the story. That is real entertainment. Keep it up. So far I read about 50+ stories in this forum but this the most entertaining.

You know how to make someone wait for it. Awesome.

I really enjoyed reading your story is was well written and hot!

LOST: 1 male virginity - 1 female semi-virginity. FOUND: Pure sexual delight.

Very nice story and writing. I would be great if you could write other stories that includ Bill or Laurie or both :)

What a great blend of comedy and eroticism, Cb. You created two adorable characters who were both vulnerable and witty - a tough combo to master. I especially enjoyed and could relate to the voice of insecurity in Billy's head. Thankfully he didn't let it keep him from speaking honestly, which I'd like to think is the reason Laurie found herself opening up to him (in more ways than one!). And to top it all off, the sex was mind-blowing! Extremely well done. I'd love to one day create the kind of positive buzz you've generated with this story in one of my Lit submissions.

How about having a hot three-some of Laurie, Rona Barett and Billie ?

Your story was so beautiful and HOT. I came THREE times! That hasn't happened in over ten years. I'm 56. Thank you thank you thank you

The lead up was great, but the sex itself didn't feel real, he came across as both too experienced, knowing exactly what to do, and lasted way too long.

There should have been some fumbling, a degree of charming awkwardness while they both learn what to do, positioning, rhythm etc.

Was a very good read.

I liked Laurie Bonner telling the story of her other sexual exploits, that's what she used to get him to let her take his virginity.

Plus get a feeling of him taking her already taken virginity.

This time she was a willing participant.

I'm going to follow this story.

Great development, pacing and then wonderfully erotic sex. One of my favorite stories, good job!

J

Love the characters in your stories... even have a plot line...keep at it !!

Lovely character detail and storyline. Really enjoyable.

I love your stories. Some of the best I've ever read in years of perusing literotica. You have a gift!

That...was...frickin'...fantastic!! So well done, super sexy, the reader gets to go on this amazing, sensual journey with lucky Bill too! I am so glad I found this story. Great job! Love love the dialogue!

Great build-up. Very descriptive. And of course, very hot.

one of the best. not just mechanical sex, like all those over-long videos, just a piston up and down in its celindrical tube. but with a real understanding of both actors and their stage of development.

It's well written, but I was bothered by how unlikely it is that a student behind another student could A) reach her ass with his knee, B) not actually reach the back of her chair, and C) actually be able to move his knee "back and forth" between her ass cheeks. Just too unbelievable; killed any interest I had in continuing the story.

Good premise.

Sex too automatic.

Needed longer period of investigating each other.

A bit of involvement with/of her ass would have been nice.

Extended details of the blowjob would have helped.

Four stars.

Wish I'd had a tutor while I was in school. Or a photography club model like Rona.

Realized at the end that I'd read this before and just like it was for Billy, just as good the second time around. The pacing was perfect, the tone was immaculate. Billy's innocence and curiosity was so endearing. Laurie's character was a bit over the top, stretching plausibility but I think that's the only way she could have been rendered. I agree with some of the negative comments below but those issues took nothing away from the pleasure of reading this story again.