All Comments on 'Demon Child Ch. 02'

Please do not stop this story i love this story...

Hm. I'll have to go find Ch. 01. I enjoyed this. :) The pacing is good; you covered a fair amount of time in broad description while slowing down temporarily for the telling scenes, and finally moving onto the crisis where everything changes (I've always liked that style for sci-fi/fantasy pieces. It works). I also liked that your narrative settled me into our heroine's head with ease; she's an outcast, so there's not a lot of dialogue, yet I still had a good idea what she thought/felt and why she acted.

I also liked your raider language; there was a logic behind it and I thought it fit in very well. For example, I had no trouble deciphering what a "venya" was. :P And I rather like the word; it sounds gentler, like a goddess-worshipping clan might make it sound. Your antagonists were deliciously 3-D just by having that small bit of insight in their language and culture! :) Made them more sexy. :P

The *only* things I might've yearned for in your description would have been to experience more scent and sound through Neekah. No issues with sight and touch, but I'm a big "scent and sound" person, so that's just personal preference I'm always looking for. :)

A good read! Now I *do* wonder where you will go with this...but for now I'm going to go back in time and find the first part. Cheers, Etaski

Okay, I just thought the first part was a special ugly backstory type, but this gore and women enjoying being raped seems to continue.

Is that really neccessary?

Urgh...

I love this! It's so creative, and well written