All Comments on 'Demon Spawn'

Need a part 2

There were a few spelling and grammar errors but those can be easily fixed by having a few extra proof readers. Other wise this is an amazing story and I would love to read more of it. I would love to know what happens in the 1 year and after for both women. I would also love to know more about that shocked look when he said the demons name. Was there some special reason for it or is there something special or strange about Ian? Please write more to let us know.

What happened when she gets out if she even does? What happened to her on "the other side? Need these answers lol

Hi I really want to read the sequel. Again just my two cents but your spellchecker or autocorrect is doing you a disservice.

Here are a few observations...

This tory leaves things open, -- should be story

not the way he should have slacked that need! - slaked not slacked

held her rigged, savouring - - rigid not rigged ?

spun on an access between them,-- axis not access

spun around a new access that now definitely included the Beast-- axis not access

also I feel that where you are using vice it should probably be vide or vis-a-vis...

On the whole I really liked this story... It was gripping and not the usual demon tale with the humanlike demon having horns , tail , hooves. this was far better world building.Keep it up ! 5 stars !

I will pay any price even if it dams my soul.

I will pay any price even if it damns my soul.

"To the left of the Priestess Ian saw his wife sitting in a sedan chair, clad in a white gown, her head uncovered."

How did she get here?

"Despite her lightened weight, it wasn't much into the descent before he found himself tiring from carrying her frail body. "

Earlier described as carrying 'tirelessly'. Confusing at this point of the story.

Good start.