All Comments on 'Desert Passions'

You do a good job of establishing the setting and introducing the characters as people and not cardboard cutouts.

You could definitely use some proofreading, though. The technical errors -- spelling, grammar, punctuation, and word choice -- do distract from the story. I'd recommend making use of one of the volunteer editors that you can find on this site.

This is a good one. And it's your best attempt at a Romance and you did a good job. ::snuggles::

So so THe course language through out, while perhaps authentic turned me off and distracted from the story. Perhaps this is romantic to a male? As a female, it wasn't my cup of tea, sorry.

I loved how the story introduced the characters and how it eventually set up the unexpected meeting between the two long- lost lovers but when they do finally meet, it somewhat feels precipitated. I was kind of hoping for a bigger payoff with slightly more foreplay and intimacy.

amazing!