by TOOL_BOY
Great start!! Can't wait for the next chapter, keep up the good work.
it's a good start (though been done before) and if you keep it sophisticated you'll have something-pistolpackinpete
Though it could have used a bit more set up time. Build it up at the start with some suggestions as to why she'd now a demon. Then do the church scene in part 2. Over all a good job. Keep at it.
Very hot!! Please give us more I want this to carry on. Like the description of anis some writers don't help you picture the scenes well enough. Good job keep it up.
It was a good story but I didn't really get anything out of it. I liked how the priest was a pedophile though. Funny good job
I'd really like part 2 to appear soon, I really want to see what is going to happen next
If she could control people, why steal from them? Why not just have the surrender everything they have? And why have sex with the priest? Why not force him to rape a child, wouldn't that be despicably evil?
The problem with absolute power is that there is no challenge, there's no limit and without barriers, boundaries, something to fight against, there is no challenge.
I loved it. Please continue the story or write another one like it. I love how evil she is