All Comments on 'Difference of One Moment'

Don't do two characters in the first person. It can get confusing.

Fine story - and fine choice for all the sibs involved. It would have been nice to know the intimacies of everyone, though. All sibs should be free to love one another... IF THEY CHOOSE! All dads and daughters... All moms and sons... As long as it's what they want to do. Sexual desire is only natural, and nature doesn't give a damn who you do it with. Only priests and other politicians try to make rules.

I liked the two different people in first person. It threw me for a second, but it also allowed me to see deeper into Sam.

the jumping from one character to another was sloppy and confusing keep it to one point of view. the writing was sloppy and needs a major editing. the plot wasn't bad but needs more and better details. this needs more background on the main characters and fewer extra characters. you have so many people comeing and going it is hard to keep up with who is doing what. find a good editor and run the story by them to straighten it out but DELETE THIS COPY FIRST.

I loved this story!

I hope you're thinking of doing another chapter I would love to read more about Lily and Jack :)

only problem i had was, the jumping from jack telling the story to sam telling it without a warning or clue what was happening,its was a bit disorientating at first to say the least

also it might just be deja vu but got feeling read something similar before

in saying that please continue and ASAP with next chapter you have a great setup for future chapters so hope you'll post them soon

I loved your story and I love these characters and would love to read more about them and their friends.

"JACK! LILY! YOUR FATHER AND I ARE GOING TO THE STORE!"

Hahaha! the Banshee voice comment could not have be truer. It fitted in so perfectly.

Do all mothers have this trait?

P.S. Great story.

CONTINUE

Talk about leaving it and us on a cliff edge.

Very disappointing !

No stars from me then I'm afraid.