All Comments on 'Diner'

Loved it!

Love your use of language. Love the setting and the impromptu story line. More please!

... for your comment. Love getting feedback like this!

Such real and believable characters and the dialogue fits them well. This is quality writing. Thank you

I think this is fantastic! Please don't stop writing :)

How you know when a writer is great: You create real people with only a few words and dialogue; the dialogue is interesting; you move the story forward with action; you set a mood and pace and stick with it; and you write stories that don't resemble each other. Great stuff.

@ lonesometraveler and HeyFor4 - thank you for your feedback on my writing. I aim for as believable people and dialogue as possible, so I'm thrilled that you've picked that out as something you like in my stories.

@ FiveWolves - wow, what can I say, except a big thank you for your amazing compliments! Awesome to get something like that from a reader, thank you.

Natural dialogue, as others have commented, that sounds just right. You also hint at greater depth in both of their lives, without going off on a tangent, or getting into a long-winded explanation. The slow build-up is best of all. Well done!

Wish I had found you sooner your stories are beautiful,believable and oh so tender, as in the Neapolitan question just loving your style. No wham bam here.

Thank you Sara, that is such wonderful writing. You are an absolute gem !!

Beautifully written, Sara. I like the development of the beginning of the story. You've got the landscape right for an Ozzie. I wonder if I would dare write a story about an aboriginal couple. I also get curious about stories where a guy 'takes liberties' with a lady, especially in public. My understanding is that this is one of the hotter female fantasies, but I, for one would never grab for a nipple or pat an ass unless it was pretty clearly offered. Note for future 'yank' stories, ladies underwear are rarely called 'knickers', though I, and many women don't like 'panties' much. A Navajo guy with green eyes would be pretty striking. Fair dinkum tale.

You show great depth of character and feeling in this quality story. It was wonderful to read.

robertodavo.

A romance more than a coupling. Nice characters, too.

Languid, descriptive, sensual. You're among the best I've read on here! I look forward to reading through your whole list of stories.

Hot, hot, hot!!!

very good!