All Comments on 'Discovering Bi Sex in Zanzibar Ch. 01'

Looking forward to the next part.

Bi sex is the best and you've got a knack for writing about it. Keep it going!

A lot of small mistakes. If you read and re-read your story before you submit, I'm sure you'll find your mistakes.

Your brief vignette is too brief. You've got a good story and an interested audience so you should much more fully develop this story. Describe the whole encounter.

Great...a little too short and too many mistakes but keep it up.

This is a nice start. More please! Can't wait to hear the rest of your stories!

Sooo, whens chapter 2 coming out, cause this story is awesome

i love bi sexual stories with mature couples

I have to agree with the other folks here.

Slow down, son, and take a deep breath. This was like adolescent sex.

Next, get an editor to help you with all your mistakes and to help you polish your writing. There's potential here, but it needs to be developed.