All Comments on 'Disillusion'

I really wish this had been longer. Excellent premise, I wish you would have fleshed it out a bit more, added more scenes, provided more character development. I could easily see this as having been a multi-chapter slow boil (without skimping on the sex, natch). It pretty much had everything I wanted -- well, I would have preferred Rick walk in on Jenkins in a group scene with 2 or 3 blond boys -- but ultimately seemed rushed.

You had a very interesting story going but far too short. Lots of wasted potential it seems like. Shame really because you seem like a decent writer.