All Comments on 'Do Me, Coffee Man!'

Your story was both cute and sexy. I like that even this short, the characters seem pretty realistic. One note however: you say Coffee Man has an "abysmal climax" the first time. I'm not sure what you meant, but 'abysmal' generally means "awful". So I don't think you meant for him to have a terrible orgasm the first time he had sex with his husband...

However, you need to do a little more editing on your stories before posting. As the previous poster said, you used the word 'Abysmal' in the wrong way when you obviously meant something like 'earth shattering'. There was another word used wrong 'seized', which means taken forcefully. The sentence indicated that you meant 'ceased' which means stopped.

Also, you mix past and present tense a couple of times through the story. All of this jars the reader and ruins the flow. There are many beta readers available. A second set of eyes can help catch these kinds of errors.

i found it dull

I agree with the others that you need to know the meaning of words before you use them, but this was short and sweet. As far as hotlover69 goes, I think he used to comment by another name here that was infamous- dinkyboots.