All Comments on 'Do Not Collect $200'

The story itself was really good, but the grammar and punctuation was atrocious! I mean almost distractingly bad! Please take advantage of the volunteer editors here before you submit your next story. And I hope the next story is a chapter 2 to this.

Good idea. Just needs a little work on the writing. but you are doing okay so please continue.

Honestly thank you for your comments. I appreciate the constructive criticism, I will take advantage of the "submission editor" or whatever it was called. Because I don't want to be called atrocious again, though it's a fun word to say LOL.

There are no excuses just the truth which is... I don't re-read through these stories and edit/proofread as I should. For that I apologize, for the mere fact that I get annoyed at reading stories that have horrible grammar so I'm a hypocrite now. *Sigh* To stop this hypocrisy I vow to use the tools available to me on my next story.

Apolegetically yours,

Naughty_angel86

loved it...keep it cummin

This made me so wet please write more. I need a sequel to get off to