All Comments on 'Doing the Sisters Ch. 01'

... for the sister

Her white tongs? What the hell are you trying to say? Do you mean thongs? If you do, are you saying her ass is so big it needs more than one thong? Seek an editor ASAP!

sweet!

Good start.

This is a great buildup to chaptr 2.

No, no, no. Not at work. Story is not organized nor logical. Too unrealistic. Were you trying for humor or satire? Reshuffle this deck, and you have a real creaming screamer. Or is it a screaming creamer???

OMG, every business need’s a woman like this to sort files.