All Comments on 'Dolly Pt. 04'

There are times where your genders seem confused. For example, in the last paragraph, ""Shh... don't" She kissed his chest and she felt him moving down his body." How can she feel him moved down his body when she's the one going down on him?

This isn't the first time. I know there are several more chapteds, but I can't continue because this type of mistake interrupts the flow my mind gets in.

Please, search for a good editor.