All Comments on 'Don Trek: The One with the Snails'

Many punctuation errors, the constant use of first names in Starfleet, which does not DO that, and othe factors let to me abandoning the story. When you break your reader out of the story - whether because they become aware of the errors, or the discontinuity, or whatever, you lose them. Get a good technical editor and listen to what they say.

Thanks for your input, and I wouldn't say you're wrong, but I do think you missed the intent of these "Don Trek" stories. They are not intended to be fully fleshed out "Star Trek" stories that follow all the "rules" of the "Star Trek" universe as much as fanciful tales of a "Star Trek" nature, inspired by "Star Trek" and influenced by people in my past.

As for the errors, I'm sure there are plenty. I spend hours going over errors at work, this is pure fun for me. For those that can enjoy it, I hope they do.

Still, thank you so very much either way!