All Comments on 'Donna's Busy Morning'

You had me fooled to the end. One of the best faux rapes I've read.

I LOVE the fact that she's a BBW. Not many authors dare to do that. And the faux rape was a great surprise.

Love the O Henry ending, but something telegraphed it a moment too soon. In the early part of the story, I found myself stumbling over some clumsy usage, but the action parts flowed well. More close and intense description of the men and their body parts would have enhanced the story, made the rape scene more intense. To intensify the surprise ending, the rape should be more horrid. Also I don't think you took the ball out of her mouth before you had her scream. Keep at it you definitely have talent